The After-Sex Smoke #2: A Dick in Time · 6:43am Jan 21st, 2018

Welcome to the After Sex Smoke! This is a blogging series for the story of the day. Today, we'll be talking about my second, more questionable fic, A Dick in Time.

So, first, before I ramble on about the story, I'd like to thank my buddies Hoovier, Absentia616, and Stardust for helping with the story in various ways. They didn't write it, of course. Maybe then, it'd be good. Hoovier did provide the idea, Absentia gave moral support, and Stardust edited the picture that I used for it, and for that, I'm super grateful.

If you read A Cell for Two, you'll probably wonder what exactly happened to my writing style from then to now. In that story, I wrote a more story-based experience and used the sex as a reason to move the plot rather than having it be the plot. This time around, the plot seems more threadbare. If it exists, you have to make leaps in logic to piece it together. I'm not ditching the old type of writing, I just felt that if I was going to step out of my vanilla bubble, I might as well do it in a way I'd never really done before.

This is actually something I've been working on (yes, I've also been slacking for months, but I've also been working!). I'm trying to see which style of writing suits the subject matter the best, and for that, I would like to do a little experiment. It's not very scientific, there are a lot of factors that can make a story good or bad, after all, but I want to use this story as an example of my older writing style. I've got another fic on the backburner that I'm going to try something new with. If the new writing style does better, I'll try to shift my focus to writing like that. Otherwise, I'll stick to my guns, and keep on trucking on.

Now, the porn. Oh god, the porn is abysmal. Really, I should be ashamed to put my name on it, but it's what I've done... I've certainly learned from my problem of specifying exactly what is happening, but the whole thing feels like I'm edging the reader! Every scene is so short and indescriptive, it might as well not be there! And in a story where the porn is supposed to be everything, it means I have no story. Also, the wording is clunky and stilted to all hell. The enjoyment factor has severely dropped from the last one, and I do apologize. I'd give it a 5 or 6/10, simply for being readable.

And that's that! A meh addition under my belt, but I'm still glad I got it out. Thanks for reading this far down, have safe travels, and I'll see you next time on The After-Sex Smoke.

"You don't understand, he would have killed me, AbVanilli!"

"Then you should have died! Died rather than betray vanilla sex, as I would have done for you!"

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