Alliteration is bad. · 2:12am Sep 13th, 2017
I notice it every time. It's like you're pulling me out of the story and going, "Look, see how smart I am?"
It has a flow to it, but it breaks the flow of the rest of the story to do it. It's like putting a rose bush amongst a patch of pumpkins. sure, the roses look nice, but it ruins the pumpkin aesthetic. It's especially bad when in the middle of a sentence.