Changelog 1.1.0 · 6:41pm Sep 7th, 2012
Romance Reports did it, Past Sins did it, Rarity's Worst Day Ever did it, so I figure I'm allowed to do it too: I've made changes to a story that's already been published for a while.
Chapter 3 of Cloudborn was full of nasty little errors. Not grammar errors either; glaring typos like orphaned words sitting where I changed a sentence and didn't do a full job of purging the old version. I dunno how I missed these things but nobody bitched about them I mean what is even up with that?
Additionally, I got a review-ish talk from I forget who on an irc channel who pointed out a couple of plotholes and other issues. I didn't want to fix them because a bunch of people have already read this story and I can't be changing actual plot things at this point, but now that I've corrected the errors I may as well improve other bits as well. I tried to keep the changes minor.
Okay, so, here are the full patch notes:
--Added a stinger to chapter 2 to emphasize the effect of the sunset on Flitter's attitude
--Fixed typing errors in chapter 3
--Improved several minor flow issues in chapter 3
--Moondancer has now only been in Ponyville for less than a year, down from five years. It's kind of absurd for her to give the line about wanting to get close when she's gone five years without having a personal chat with Flitter or noticing her crush.
--The Winng Corps now has a realistically early start time.
--Cloudchaser's base damage reduced by 4
--Cloudchaser's abilities now properly scale with bonus AD while she is under the effects of a Magic Bit
As I've been saying, I have two fun things coming down the line that aren't clop but that I hope you'll all enjoy. Both of 'em are stuck in editing for the moment because I like playing the whole ponychan review game--maybe I'll skip that with these and have a little faith in myself to write something good without handing it to somepony else for approval!
That's a moot point though as one of 'em probably ought not be posted due to the contest it was made for not being technically finished yet.
With both of these I'm gonna try for the EQD+fimfic READER SPIKE COMBO so as to hit the featured box. The problem with this is that fimfic has a waiting period just like EQD. There's a lot of luck involved.
Trixie's Magic Bit did it as well- RWDE went back and revised the whole tone of certain scenes, which is more like what you mean, but Trixie's Magic Bit went through something like twenty published chapters finding,
"Concluding period." Dash said flatly.
and changing every single one into
"Concluding comma," Dash said flatly.
That's because doing it that way is both correct, and allows the concluding period to work for denoting sentence fragments:
"Concluding period." Applejack blinked. Twilight gasped. Dash looked unrepentant about what she'd said.
Hell yeah, especially if the book isn't finished and you leveled up in something- revise! There will be new ponies coming along who read it the right way from the start. Use your own judgement as to what to leave alone and what to fix.
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Not to mention,
"Interrupting comma," Applejack said, "then continue without capitalization."
"Interrupting comma," Rainbow Dash agreed, finishing the sentence. "Then start a new sentence afterward."
Twilight cleared her throat. "You can also use a dash when you get interrup--"
"CUTIE MARK CRUSADER GRAMMAR EDITORS, YAY!"
I am one of the aforementioned people who hasn't started this fic yet, so yay revisions!