About "Leap of Faith" by A bag of plums

Okay, this is not really a review but more of a rant, sadly...

So, first of, I love Assassin's Creed and I think Plums has the potential to be a good author.

That said...

As soon as they write from the perspective of a humane6-character they just fail. A bag of plums generally has problems with their characters but it's mostly apparent in them.

What's the problem? They are incredibly annoying. They're stupid, naive and suffer from a grave misconception of their personalities which leads to incredibly overplayed vices.

'Stupid and naive, you say. How so?'

For one, despite them, their friends and their families being in mortal danger they decide to go to a movie (basically an Assassin's Creed movie) and later do a 'dress-fitting'. Strike one. (Or something. I don't know anything about baseball, so...)
The next thing is, Velvet Breeze, the second protagonist, newest friend and assassin of the group, wanted to at least bring one or more knives etc. but the 6 idiots were supposed to like, talk her out of it because they say "Hey, I'd rather have me and/or my friends kidnapped/killed than see the one who tries to do those horrible things to us, be hurt or, god forbid, die." (Of course, not really what they said, but they might as well have.) Them not even once grasping the ramifications of their situation is infuriating. And then thinking they know better than the one who was trained for situations like this? GAH! Granted, that last one is sadly rather realistic but that doesn't make it less frustrating.

Then there's the part where they try to find out if Velvet is Velvet and it just goes nowhere. Yes, the audience catches certain clues — which are rather inconclusive right now (Chapter 25) — but there never is even a slight note of the characters catching them, which of course breaks the whole illusion or immersion or whatever you wanna call it. I mean, really, it's like they lack even the slightest inkling of conclusive thinking. Fu**ing depressing. Well, except of course, when the author wants to get on with it...

'What's with the misconception stuff. You know the perception of characters can be pretty subjective.'

Yes, but even I don't dislike the shows Rainbow Dash — yes, she's one of my least favourite characters of the entire series but still one I just normally ignore — as much as I do this one. Rainbows vice is arrogance, that I can deal with. But here she's arrogant and overly oblivious, wanting to join the Assassins "because it's cool". What. The. Fu**. This is a Rainbow I'd call obnoxious.

And Rarity whines. All the time. About the same fu**ing issues over and over again. Which, if you watch the show again, happens rather rarely. Yes, I know what I did there and I'm not changing it.

Then there was also the issue in Ch25 where a grown man and Assassin acted like a teenage boy who's high on hormones when he's called out about his crush. *sigh*

You know, the thing is, A bag of plums actually still managed to capture my interest and got this story featured, which admittedly doesn't count for much, but still something. And when he's describing a scene or writing a character that's not a protagonist, his writing shines. But then there's their inability to commit to a more serious tone such a story asks for. And no, that does in fact not mean that I want it to be edgy or gritty or grim. Serious stories can still have lighthearted moments and even outright humor. Those moments are actually really important. That's what makes those stories so fascinating and is a big part of making the characters more "relatable", as people like to say.

Thus it pains me to not being able to at least give this story a thump-up. *sigh*

Well, maybe the chapters to come will make it worth it.

Bye.

~Nightjar

Annotation #1
Just read Chapter 26 and, yep, still not worth it. But fu**ing hope dies last.