Daughter of Discord Blog Logs Chapter 14

Chapter 14: Fights

So when I first saw the chapter title I raised an eyebrow as I said nothing perfect but writing a fight between two characters is hard work and needs care and-

"Daddy, I love him!"

NO! No! No! No! No! No! NO!!! For all those who are unware of this I don't like this chapter we are at the halfway point and now we getting into love, I think it would have been better if it was the word crush or feelings not love.

Now this line remind me of the worst game of all time with the worst love story of all time. Yes worst then Twilight it called Sonic The Hedgehog or known as Sonic 06. That love story is better then this one! I know I can't take that back seeimg how it a love story between a human and a hedgehog but at less it tried to build a connect between the two so they can have a romance. Here it comes out of nowhere

This could have been done so much better then what happen but insaid it just says I love him that not how this works. You need to have a connect to him before any feelings can be used this is just a crush nothing more, this is terrible and I want to not read the rest of this story after reading that line. I wanted to stop and won't go onto future chapters.

To me this is the weakest part of the story and the worst chapter I think it could have been done much better and the pacing is horrible. This could have work a little bit better but now I'm starting to like Bride of Discord romance better then this because the two always was together and connect with each other and fell in love here it just oh now I love him because plot. I don't think that makes a good story and it loses it feel on my liking on this one. I sure hope that this only gets better, I hope but I feel like I'm going into something I won't like.

But we do learn that Gemstone has piano lessons, now how can she play the piano without any fingers? Umm.... Oh look at that we're runing out of time funny that ha, ha, ha, ha see you all on Thursday because tomorrow is MLP: FLM