Thoughts on Chapter 5 · 3:11pm Aug 11th, 2012
As I stated a few times before this chapter was so difficult to write. Especially the Apple Bloom scene for whatever reason. I should also credit the picture that gave me the idea for her Cutie Mark. We will never stop the journey by Feyrah Anyway, it just felt awkward to me even though it's supposed to be awkward, it felt awkward in a storytelling kind of way. Another scene was one of the last scenes where Ruby teaches Leo about his magic. I struggled to find the right cause for the scene to happen in the first place. I already had the idea that humans in Equestria can use magic but I had no way of exploring that so finally, I made it a short training session between Ruby and Leo trying to make Ruby as unlikeable as possible for now.
Now for the romance moment between Rarity and Leo. The moment you were all most likely not waiting for but it happened. Romance scenes come very easily to me normally so this one was no problem. I decided to add the element of Leo teaching Rarity more about language to make it seem more genuine. I thought it was cute.
Anyway, more chapters coming your way. The Sixth Report will be up next week and I'm currently working on the Seventh which should be up the following week. As always, criticisms are encouraged.