Madness Abe's Upcoming Story Idea (if he can get his lazy ass into gear) · 6:17pm May 15th, 2014
Well....I'm here, I guess. And I got a few (I mean, two) ideas planned for some stories....
Without further ado, here's one:
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The following preview has not been approved by all audiences by the Inquisition of House Moon and Star.
15 years...
It has been 15 years since the events of the past have given birth to the events of now....
The Princesses have vanished. Equestria is now tearing itself apart. Its former protectors have now become its own tyrants.
Moon and Star. Earthborn. Stormwing. Whitegold. Everfree. Laughter.
Houses led by fallen heroes. All they seek is the antithesis of what they once represented.
Power
Archmagister Twilight Sparkle oversees painful experiments performed by the Inquisition, not showing a single care or emotion.
Mistress Rarity grins as she sees a new day's gain of profits and money. She knows exactly where it came from, and she does not care.
Commander Applejack looks over the new executions of captured unicorns. She does not show a sign of pity. This needs to be done.
Commander Rainbow Dash sees another collection of dead bodies, from her own armies and the enemies. She does not care how many must die for her own goals to continue.
Lady Fluttershy simply looks on as her own forces literally tear apart a surrendering enemy force and devour them. Such is the law of nature itself.
The Laughing Mare cackles madly alongside with her never ending hordes of followers and cultists, all gladly willing to die for her.
Rebels fight against them and die against them. Hope is dwindling among those that remain.
An aging, bearded stallion with an hourglass cutie mark looked into a mirror, smashing it in out of anger and frustration.
Equestria is dead
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MADNESS ABE PRESENTS....
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No creature in Equestria is meant to live forever...
It is time to let the Houses know this.
A black, glowing ring floats above the ground, spinning slowly before it speeds off violently towards an icy crater.
The ring slams into the ground, speeding ever deeper into the ground, until it reaches a skeleton wearing armor and a crown. Said ring enters to where the heart of the skeleton once had....
KING SOMBRA OF EQUESTRIA.
RISE.
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The ground rumbles violently as a dark hoof rips itself out of the ground, crawling and digging itself out. In a few moments, the undead looking corpse of a gray stallion wearing silver armor, silver crown, a wild black mane, eyes glowing red, and sharpened teeth stood within the cold mountains.
"Do you listen, Sombra?"
"Yes."
"Do you see them, Sombra? Those who died and escaped me?"
"I do."
"No one escapes Death, Sombra. You are the Black Hoof now: the embodiment of this corps. And you know what must be done."
Sombra stares silently for the longest time...before he grins.
"Of course I do....."
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A FANFICTION LOOSELY INSPIRED BY POORYORICK AND DC COMICS
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Sombra's now black horn glows immensely as a multitude of new black rings begin to appear and glow brightly before they speed off into the distance.
Soon enough, each ring crashes into the designated targets and begin the process of reanimation...
CLOVER THE CLEVER
COMMANDER HURRICANE
PRINCESS PLATINUM
SMART COOKIE
CHANCELLOR PUDDINGHEAD
PRIVATE PANSY
RISE!!!
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"What are you saying?" Archmagister Twilight says in shock.
"I have come to believe, Ma'am, that the dead...are reanimating." speaks a shaking Inquisitor.
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Earthborn forces open fire into a horde of undead, blowing off limbs and other body parts in a few seconds.
The forces begin to smile and preemptively cheer...before they are silenced as they see the dead simply stand back up and regenerate.
Commander Applejack's sole eye widens in absolute terror.
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NIGHT LIGHT
TWILIGHT VELVET
BLUEBLOOD
THUNDERHOOVES
DINKY DOO
RISE!!!
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"NO! NO! NO!!!!!" screams a single Stormwing soldier before being blasted with a black energy blast into his chest.
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"I have heard tales of this threat. But I fear that the worst has not come yet." spoke a worried Zecora.
"What is this threat, Zecora?" spoke Fluttershy, who truly felt a twinge of fear in the first time in years.
"There are tales told that when the night becomes its blackest in the skies....it would be the time for the living to fall and the dead to rise."
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"AAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!"
"My lady, what is wrong?!" spoke a Cultist, half laughing and half worried.
"THE DEAD RISE! THE BLACKEST NIGHT IS HERE!" the Laughing Mare yelled in absolute terror.
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The walls of Whitegold fall to a massive black blast of energy.
The shield guarding Canterlot follows the same fate.
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King Sombra, his eyes now black as midnight itself, stands atop a mountain chanting...
"The blackest night falls from the skies...
The darkness grows as all light dies....
We crave your hearts and your demise...
By my Black Hoof....
Somba's eyes widen and glow as he smiles sadistically.
THE DEAD SHALL RISE!!!!
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MADNESS ABE PRESENTS...
EQUESTRIA DIVIDED: THE BLACKEST NIGHT
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The aging stallion with the hourglass cutie mark looks to a glowing light and speaks as his voice quivers in fear.
"C-can anything..anything stop this night?"
The light glows brighter and the stallion hears a voice in his head.
"The light of will. Of fear. Of greed, hope, rage, compassion, and love."
"Only that can end the blackest night."
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PROBABLY NOT COMING SOON TO FIMFICTION
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Well, there's that.
For those who don't know what I just featured, I'd like to recommend you to the amazing alternate universe of Equestria Divided here on Fimfiction based on a series of great artwork and lore (sadly cancelled), existing in a great group to be in. And I also recommend the amazing storyline of Blackest Night from DC Comics to know what you might expect.
Any opinions on this?
Okay, let's see what Abe linked me...
Wait... an Equestria Divided story?...
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Sorry to correct you here, but the Cult of Laughter isn't reall a 'House'. Their what they are: A Cult. Minor nitpick, but still.
Ponified War Doctor?
Fitting.
Seem's like it'll be interesting, a little series of stories based off the Equestria Divided unive-
.... What?
What?
N-No.. You can't mean that-!
YOU DO!
BLACK LANTERNS IN EQUESTRIA DIVIDED!
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All-in-all, this looks very promising. My only nitpick is that some of the wording seem's a bit strange (yelled in absolute terror sounds, no offence, a bit... amateur.), and the exclamation marks are a bit over the top some times.
If you need a beta-reader or something, I'd be more then willing to do so.
All-in-all, very nice. I can't wait for the final product.
Also, I think this may help your creative spark.
2114598 Yeah, I know some of this didn't sound too well, but it's just my experimental trailer. Hopefully, everything else will be fixed and written better in the final product.
Yeah, I know the Cult of Laughter isn't a "House", but it's often referred to as such in other fics. You can't really call them "5 Houses and a Cult", since it sounds weird.
Yeah, it's essentially the War Doctor, or an aging Time Turner (taking a note from you, he's not the Doctor, but Doctor-esque in ways). He's hopefully going to be a major part of the story.
Oh, I already knew about that group and art. It's one of the main contributors to the story's concept.
Sure! You're the first man I'll have to be the beta for this. Expect to see familiar dead to rise and others gaining Lanterns to even the odds.