DERPY'S FINEST HOUR REMAKE

Have any of you read "Derpy's finest hour" if so keep reading this if not read the story then puke then like or dislike then come back to this. I plan on making a remake of the story and i might need help for a proof reader or editor on this also would you all be so kind to give me ideas through out the story thanks.

P.s. I got permission to mess with story.
P.s.s. i copied the begining from the real story.
P.s.s.s I'm sorry =C