Tone. · 10:28am Jan 24th, 2014
Tone, it's a tough thing.
Take for example From the Desk of Ambassador Wildcard
When I started, the tone was light and comical. As it continued the tone shifted, to take a more serious slant. The comedy ended. It's almost like there's two stories: Wildcard and Flankenstein's wacky adventures, and then Wildcard and First Class's soap opera. Throw a bunch of sometimes barely sensical exposition and there you have it In post-conclusion editing I will try and bring some of the dryer parts closer to the set average comical tone, perhaps even adding sequences.
Luna's Characterization and Dr. Flankenstein's history are also elements that need work.
The specific background of the changelings I came up with on the fly, it'll also need to be reworked.
The economy needs to be reworked, it got weird.
Rainbow Dash really needs to feature more, but I can't really shoehorn her in. Might be a part of the new comical sequences.
Twilight was in here like, once? She'll be in the conclusion too, but not really a main character.
In the end the purpose of this story was to build background for ACHNE, which it has fulfilled elegantly. However that's no excuse for it being a weak story. This was also an experiment where I forced myself to not think ahead, everything was created on the fly. Again, no excuse for any problems.
If anybody has anything to add, point out, or just plain insult- add it as a comment. Any input is good input.
