Editor Wanted

Hai, I'm back at writing again, but apparently my writings are some time very difficult to read, according to some, but I have to admit I think my writings are very difficult to read, so anyone who's interested in helping me with my writing, give me a PM, would you kindly ?
Also I want you're opinion between my CoV and Stick Up Artists story for comparison sake, because all of the demand of editor came from Stick up Artists but none from CoV, Give the feedback anywhere you want the comment section or this blog.