What am i doing?

So basically I noticed that I could blog stuff to further my role in Fimfiction. So I guess I'll make a post to discuss whatever I need too. Hopefully I can use this to receive criticism since I believe my one and only story (Hatred of the Antibrony) could use some kind of advice so I can find a way to make it more interesting because let's face it, all it's really been was some guy just goofing around talking to himself. So send me advice and tell me what I could do.

Comments

[Griseus]

Do you want him to succeed at what he wants or what he needs?

His thoughts are not always true or right. Having said that, I agree that he sees some of the big picture. The Antibrony is currently in a world that being corrupted by his world and the knowledge that their world might not be real. You wake up one day and find out you are just some cheap commercial to sell toys. Where is the backlash from the ponies?

What about Twilight? In her own way she is isolated like the Antibrony. She is different than her peers. (She has been human in this story?) She's not stupid and Zayn (or Discord) going spill out that there were more followers or return to the garage. How is she going to deal with being a murderer? Not very well. This character has a history of overreacting.

You have set up some neat conflicts you could explore.

[Angrywritingskills]

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Thanks for the feedback and support. I do plan on expanding on things, I just wanted to make sure I was heading in the right direction.

[Griseus]

1537717 Don't fear going nuts with your story. At the end of the day you are the one who writes the story. Also, master comma usage. It makes everything better to read.* Besides my two cents, I don't know what would be right direction.

*disclaimer: I've not mastered this, but still enjoy it's benefits.