review two- Sisterly guidence · 5:28am Apr 27th, 2013
Hello everypony with the four or five people reading, this is on a story called sisterly guidence this is by KrishanaKarnak this is a Rainbow Dash/Scootaloo/ and CMC fanfic, note this was a remake of the previous fanfic I think not sure. But in nutshell this story has Rainbow Dash playing the normal fanfic role of being a sister to Scootaloo and since the two fillies live somewhere else from other family members like Rainbow Dash, she lives in Ponyville while her father lives in Cloudsdale, and well we have no idea where scootaloo's parents are.Rainbow Dash would have to play the role of sister and parent, in this fanfic she seems more like a parent what makes the fanfic odd is that she goes back when she and Rainbow Dash went camping with Applejack and Applebloom and Sweetie Belle and her sister. The creativity was almost spot on totally new, and the fact you said why Scootaloo was in trouble was great, the creativity gets about a C+ what turned it in the other direction was how you made Rainbow Dash sound like Applejack. The speech/description was also almost spot on again Rainbow Dash had speech patterns that sounded like Applejack. But besides the point the rest was amazing how you described Scootaloo struggling it was great however I don't want to spoil to much but cheak it out put in Sisterly guidence and tell me what you thought. the speech get's a solid B+ for the description and Scootaloo's speech and description pattern. The story was quite amazing she is playing the role of her mother and at the same time a big sister the story get's an B+ as well. The story over all get's an, A- but as I've said in my previous story send me a story to read or even send me your screen name and let me see what kind of reviews you've done. And always this is Humane Caos.
