Apr
5th
2013
Suggestion Box · 10:37pm Apr 5th, 2013
Hello dear readers both new and old.
I thought I would set up a suggestion box of a sort for those of you who have some suggestions for the story 'The Equestrian Experience'.
This is set up so I can get as munch input as possible on the story since I see the writing of it as a learning experience.
I would love to hear what you think of the story so far.
Is it to slow, am I not giving the characters enough time to develop or any other problems or ways you would like to see the story go please leave them here.
I can't guaranty that I'll use your input, but I'll listen and take them into consideration.
Love and Friendship.
Happy-X-rays.
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Do not put weird, and I mean really wierd, twists in your story. There is no better way to ruin a story than that. A little tip
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By really weird twists do you mean twist that doesn't make any sense or?
I like the story so far. It doesn't matter to me what you do with the story, but like Bizanchinryuu said "No twists." If he starts to have feelings for Fluttershy, I'll eat my hat.
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What do you mean?
Just want to make sure that it means the same in English as it does in my language.
984010 And....what does it mean in your language?
983663 Mostly things that give the story a twist that turns the plot away from the original idea for the story. A stereotypical twist you shouldn't do: He suddenly wakes up realising it was all a dream.
Readers came here for a story about a human in equestria and if you make him wake up on Earth, that is a completely different story. That kind of twists.
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From a Danish dictionary:
used to assure the listener to the same presumption in a particular case is right.
This what you meant?
Sorry just not used to this phrase being used outside Denmark.
984808 No hahahaha, what I really mean is if he does fall in love with her I will literally eat a hat. IF he does.
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And would that be a good or bad thing.
985412 Good for you, bad for me. You could laugh at me as I eat that hat , I even got one picked out. Don't worry about laughing at me. I like to make everpony laugh when I can.
Have a question.
Would it be a good idea touse other characthers point of view or should I keep it at only one point of view?
Well I think you are writing a great story there really isn't much I'd change. I really hope to fall in love with shy because even though she is one of the more common love interests i haven't read a really well written fluttershy X you fic in a long time. So if that is the direction this story is going then
. One thing though I think I need to have a talk with fluttershy I may have been frustrated that I thought I could handle myself before she intervened but she was only trying to help :(.
1092563 I think keeping it the same but having the characters vocalize a little more would be good
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From the last three chapters, or in general could you give me a example on vocalizing?