Well, that was a bit disheartening.

So I decided to try and submit MLW to Equestria Daily. After a couple of weeks, I finally got a response. Not a good one, either. So they say I need to look for;

Tense consistency
Compound word hyphenation
Comma splices
Capitalization
Comma use
Semicolon use

So, atm, chapter 18 is on hold while I'm rereading through the chapters I have now to try and fix them. Hopefully this'll only take a few days.