A small update. · 4:47am Feb 17th, 2013
Hello to my few watchers.
As you may have noticed, I changed the title of my fic to A Dragon's Craft of Musical Harmony to better reflect the content. I guess a reference to Stevie Wonder is a little bit to0 obscure. I submitted my fic to EqD for revision, and the response was a negative.
Here's a bit from the response, as a not-comprehensive list of bullet points:
- The accents, while a nice touch, came across as nearly-unreadable at points. Refining these sections would keep a reader from skimming past.
- Having an idea of the time skip here would go a long way towards keeping potential readers from balking at your intended Octavia and Spike ship. If I had to guess, I'd say it's been thirty years or more, but it seems more like it could be even longer. (..)
- Typos and grammar were noted, but more on the latter than the former. Some sections seem to read a bit oddly.
- In the same vein as the last point, I've noticed lacking commas, and periods where commas would suffice. Paragraphing the dialogue a bit more would also be of help.
Though all critique is allowed and encouraged, I'm upset the pre-reader chose to only read the prologue, which is only an explanation I felt necessary to tell the reader how the story came to be. The very few people who have read the chapters know that the fic has a bit more to offer. I don't know what to make of this other than find an editor. Given my very limited readership, I find that a little hard to do.
Onix, out.
EDIT: I do understand the EQD pre-readers have a lot of fics to go through, so setting my 10k chapters aside is expected.
Speaking as your pre-reader, we have a policy. If the issues are too numerous within an initial chapter, we WILL stop reading and make our review there. There's no sense in reading another 4 K when there's enough problems in a starting 2500 words to find if the issues subside.
That being said, 10 K chapters are nothing for me. I read 12, 15, 20 K chapters regularly.
thank you.