[SBCM] Minor edits and chapter 4 work · 3:25am Mar 6th, 2012
Hello, ponies.
I have invoked my universe-changing powers to make a minor tweak to chapter 1, simply because it helps a bit with setup for chapter 4, and also to introduce an otherwise thusfar-little-used character. So, for those who care to know the new retconned history, there is one modification and one addition to chapter 1:
Modified: A conversation during the introduction
... However, the dirt she pushed up from her sudden slide was beginning to tickle her nose, and very soon she was letting loose a sequence of cute, high-pitched sneezes.
Twilight was watching the sky, acting as if she hadn’t noticed the display. When it finally stopped, Apple Bloom looked up with all the rage she could muster. It wasn’t much; after all, this was still a very exciting morning for her.
“Seven!” Pinkie Pie’s ability at the art of the non sequitur was only rivaled by her complementary ability to appear as if from nowhere. Although Apple Bloom’s small degree of anger melted immediately into befuddlement at this strange comment, Twilight had long since become accustomed to pink interruptions, and so just gazed on, awaiting an explanation.
“I’ve never seen anyone sneeze seven times in a row. I always sneeze three times, and I know I’ve seen Rainbow Dash sneeze twice, and I don’t think I’ve ever seen Rarity sneeze more than once and Fluttershy’s barely even counts as once … haven’t you ever noticed that ponies always sneeze the same number of times?”
“What the hay is she talkin’ about?” Apple Bloom thought to herself, but decided to respond more politely.
“Uh, nope, I guess I haven’t. Anyway, nice to run into y’all, but–”
“Actually,” Twilight interrupted, “I don’t.”
Pinkie slitted her eyes and stared at, or perhaps through, Twilight for a brief instant. She dug a hoof into the ground, and with a dramatic sweep, spread a fine dust into the air, mostly aimed directly at the unicorn.
The reaction was only natural.
“Three!”
Twilight just smiled and shook her head. Trying to understand the antics of her high-spirited friend was a futile exercise she’d long since forgone. Instead, she turned to Apple Bloom, who was still searching for an excuse to escape the conversation. “Isn’t Ponyville beautiful in the morning?”
The delayed filly considered for a moment the possibility that Twilight and Pinkie were intentionally keeping her from her friend as some kind of cruel prank, but dismissed it.
“It sure is, Twilight. And I’m sure I’ll see the whole sunrise sometime, but–”
“I know,” Twilight said, almost listful, “go see your friend.”
Apple Bloom grinned. “See ya later Twilight, see ya later Pinkie, bye!” And with that, she was off again.
Added: Pinkie sense
“Whoaaaah!”
Pinkie Pie’s tail contorted itself of its own volition into complicated knots, while her left ear and right hind leg jerked back and forth in perfect unison. In her convulsing, she knocked a, thankfully empty, muffin tray from a nearby table, making quite a racket as it clanged disharmoniously into the tile below. She slid uncontrollably into a wall, knocking a bag of flour off of a high shelf and, predictably, all over herself. At least the sudden shower put a stop to her spasms.
Pumpkin Cake and Pound Cake clapped merrily at the display, giggling and cooing delightedly. Their mother, distracted by the noise, poked her head through the kitchen door and asked, concerned, “Pinkie Pie, is everything OK in there?”
“I think so … but I’ve never had that Pinkie sense combo before!”
Now, as per chapter 4, know that it is forthcoming. I've been a bit distracted, but no worries. I'm still typin' away.
And thanks again to my editor Landee for suggestions et cetera.
Cheers,
- Clavier
