Nightmare Moon survives the Elements' power and takes Twilight as her prisoner. Now, the alicorn queen must establish her monarchy and defend her rightful place as queen against those that oppose her.
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I am going to plant my boot so far up your ass you'll be sneezing shoelaces for a MONTH for that cliffhanger!
Other than that, fucking epic. Also, for the part where she's resurrecting it, try listening to the chorus of the Ballad of Sweeney Todd.
GAAAARRRR cliffhangers damn it...and why do I get the feeling moon beam is just a regular looking unicorn...
68779 Lol don't worry. I fully deserve the boot to my rear. I just love it though And the Sweeney Todd chorus would be AMAZING for this.
68782 Ohohoho. She' so much more than just a regular unicorn. So. Much. More.
Also, as a side note, you guys read so damn fast. Do you sit at your computers every other night and refresh the page in hopes that the next chapter will be popping up? I know I do it for some fics I read
68789No of course not what could ever make you imagine that(refreshes computer)
But seriously I read super fast
DAMN CLIFFHANGERS
Wonder what creature it is since bookwork Twilight cant describe it, or its just a little filly and twilight is to shocked to describe it or something
I feel like it something none of us will guess... like a ... uh, Trixie or a hippo... perhaps a hydra... Or maybe another Twilight, that would blow my mind.
68840 Hehehe 'Ultimate Showdown'
And thus Rarity was finally able to dress Twilight, which she had tried and failed the day prior to the Summer Sun Celebration.
I wonder if the others will be in more or less than a hurry to rescue Twilight once Rarity gives them the news?
The arrogance Nightmare Moon has, may be very well the achilles heel from which others shall use...to put her down. She is reckless, devoid of patience and extremely naive. Even without Twilight or the mane six presence, civil unrest is sure to happen regardless of how much tyranny or death she can give to them. If they are fed up, they will "break" her. With or without Celestia, what does Nightmare have, capable of appeasing the masses?
Why, the princess`s former pupil Twilight Sparkle. Beloved by all, known for her kindness and sapience, she is the ray from which they endure Queen Moon´s petty whims. Surely, the masses may think that either she is a traitor or...Nightmare Moon may be not so "evil" so to speak. Which is a lie cause we know she´s quite the evil clingy one.
It as if Twilight was a plushie doll from which Queen Moon so dearly glomps for safety and warmth.
"Rarity could hear conversation but couldn't decipher the words through the think barrier. In a manner of minutes, the doors opened inwards revealing the current occupants to the white unicorn."
Two errors far too close together are underlined above.
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I was wondering, will Nightmare learn of Nightmare Night in the fic or will it remain beneath her notice for the time period the fic covers?
me being the fanboy that I am I could see Dancing Mad fitting well with the summoning. As for why Moon beam is having the affect that she is on Twilight, well given that she's ment to be near Nightmare's level of ability and is apprently VERY loyal to her queen, Enough so to warrent a rather elaboret crypt and a reserection from the dead especaly given how much effort that took from Nightmare to pull off I"d bet my prostetic eye that Moon beam is not only far from noemal but also isn't one to be trifled with herself. Strap in fellow reader the dinamic of this fic is in for an abrupt shift.
Nice bit of backstory for Brook there, I'm kinda surprized that twilight didn't react when it was mentioned how closely and offten Brook watched her over the years. I don't see things going too smoothly for her now that Moon Beam is about. In part because she most likely won't be able to spend time with Twilight like she wanted and well I can't see Moon beam being thrilled that one of her major duties is being Nightmare's "Pet sitter."
i have to give it to rarity she handled the whole situation with nightmare moon and twilight quite well. It shows not only that she's quite the capible actress, and buisness women to be able to push her emotions aside and preform such a job with the kinds of stresses it would involve but also speak to her talents to be albe to tell such bold faced lies to a being with that kind of power and expereence on her side and get away with it.
Delfy once more makes a rather good point, it's something that I've been thinking about scince we found out that Castle Nightmare is made primarily of obsidion. While i can agree that it is a very fitting choice given the kind of astetic that Nightmare Moon wants I can't help but think of the old say about glass houses and bricks.
68789 honestly i dont know about every pony else BUT I SURE AS HELL DO....so WRITE MORE AND SNAP TO IT YOUR PRINCE DEMANDS YOU
Here's a weird idea I had for this fic, After Spike finds out Twilight's fate he becomes more determined than ever to get her back, between his desire to have his mother figure back, and the mind boggeling extravigance of nightmare's castie when he finaly arrives to try and free Twilight his draconic instinkts kick in causing him to ener the greedy/ hoarding phaze and well make a mess of things in his attempt to get Twilight back.
Like i said it was a weird idea I had that I felt like sharing for some reason or another.
69270 Thank you I'll fix that. (Little known fact: Peppy doesn't actually take two days to write these. Peppy procrastinates and does it all in under six hours on the second day) And I don't know if I'll involve Nightmare Night or not. I hadn't really thought about it. This shall be considered though.
69344 There will be more explanation of Brook in coming chapters. She is, if you couldn't already tell, an important character to the story. As for Twilight's lack of reaction. She's been under the servitude of Nightmare Moon for a little over a month. A near stalker obsession stemmed from a good deed is certainly just water under the bridge to her. The obsidian palace thing is certainly quite the conundrum. On one hand it looks beautiful and quite creepy. On the other you could very easily tear down its walls with little force. Or can you? You do not yet know what all Nightmare Moon has had this thing built with. It will come into play later on. Also the thought of Spike trying to hoard the castle made me giggle.
69016 Hehehe 'Stand' and 'fall'
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I noticed that work is not done everyday on FiM Fiction. (Fun fact: the total number of chapters and words is visible on your profile page, including unreleased chapters that are still a work in progress).
69796 Oh that's pretty cool. I hadn't noticed that (I never check my profile page and even if I did it wouldn't give me a very accurate reading as to what others see.) That pretty good to know xD Now I can stalk all the author's that are taking forever to write
You know what would be funny? If Moon Beam gets obsessed with Twilight and fights Nightmare for her. That would be something fun to see.
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Check the comments for chapter 4, it is stated that there would be major problems with Moon Beam X Twilight. Besides, we do not even really know what Moon Beam is yet.
I just get this weird feeling that some how in some way, Moon Beam is related to Twilight. Could just be that I'm over-thinking this, but it seems that way to me. Other than that random thought, great story so far and can't wait for more.
@ Isador I had the idea that Twilight was somehow a desendant of Moon Beam but I don't think that's right. If only for the simple fact that I don't think she had time to start a family before nightmare's war ended up taking her life.
Hmm, I wonder Spike and the rest will take to the news that rarity is going to bring back with her? While it's a given that none of them will like the sitation that Twilight is in what we don't know is how they will handle an issue as delicet as this. While they are nowhere near as bad as the rest of Ponyvil at large and FAR more level headed then the flower trio (The Ponyvil panic bells.) They still have a tendency to jump to conclusions at times. On the plus side They'll also be able to atleast find the throneroom and dining hall thank's to rarity's eye for details and rather keen memory.
I think that we're starting to see a bit of shift in attitudes between both Twilight and Nightmare Moon.In the case of the latter, while she still calls Twilight her pet, still puts her in shackles at night and forbids her her magic she lets Twilight share her bed, was quite egar to get her an outfit that she found appealing/ flattering, and seemed very pleased that twilight was fond of her natural mane and tail colors. While at the same time the only reasons that Twilight wanted to bather were one to simpaly feel clean and two so she didn't offend the dressmaker. She also seems to show atleast an astetic appreaction of Nightmare's looks, and while it was in part of resignation that she said it she did refer to herself as Nghtmare's pet.
It will mostlikly be a while yet but the two do seem to be drawing twoards each other. This is especaly true on twilight's part as she has a bit of a hope spot. Not only can she find comfort in Brook for the time being she also has the distent possiblity of her friends trying to come to her aid now that she has come across Rarity. Keep up the good work Peppy this story seems to be improoving more and more with each chapter.
Heh and here I go again off on a tangent.
70782 Hehe tangent or not you know quite well what I'm doing with this. Nightmare Moon might not show it but it gives her great pleasure to dress her pet in such an enticing outfit. Its one of her secret fetishes and as such will be built upon as the story unfolds.
I hate the cliffhanger but u'd probly just laugh and say, "get the F* over it and hurry up and get to readin the F*-in book!"
How close was I?
The descriptions are, again, spot on and vivid. Reading how you describe Nightmare Moon's power gives me chills. I gotta say, cliffhangers, however well done as yours, tend to be a huge kick in the nuts when you're really enjoying a story.
"Twilight kept her focus on Nightmare Moons face" -
Hey, does this story have Discord in it? poni.0au.de/images/characters/discord.png
haHA! It ain't no cliffhanger for ME! I get to keep reading! Sucks to be you! xD *Keeps reading*
Visions of mutated ponies augmented with various parts of other creatures filled her head, Was that a Discord Reference?
466588 More of a silent hillish thing.
well that's an awkward was to comfort someone....
2700785 stalker alert
2700785 Not creepy at all!