Nightmare Moon survives the Elements' power and takes Twilight as her prisoner. Now, the alicorn queen must establish her monarchy and defend her rightful place as queen against those that oppose her.
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Once again, this story proves why it is one of my absolute favorites. Well done indeed. I eagerly await the next chapter. It's nice to see that Nightmare is becoming Luna again, if slowly and only a little bit at a time. Keep up the great work, everypony!
796472 She isn't at all. She may not be as cruel, but Twi calling her Luna is only meant as an act of endearment. She's still Nightmare Moon, but it's to remind her that she doesn't have to be a 'nightmare'. Plus, it's easier to write.
Yaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaay!
Due to the fact that this (these) chapter(s) took so long to get out, i was starting to loose interest, kinda.
But now you really proved to me why you're my fave Horsestory author.
The amounts of times i've played with Rarity's and Twilight's conversation in my mind, thinking i've nailed it perfectly, and here you go making my "perfect" scenario look like poo.
i wish i could come with some sort of constructive criticism but im in full fangirl mode, and everything about this fic is perfection in my eyes.
Sorry.
w00t! Update!
The mare’s attached to the coach gave a pair of impatient whinnies, urging the trio to hurry so that they may continue their regular duties.
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And then NMM incinerated them for telling the queen to hurry up
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hmmm does this remind you of anything?
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or does this one?
hmmm... peppy you sly dog you atleast now i know why brook was so ANAL.
Moon's last comment killed me. Glade to see things are getting patched up.
796479 That I say is a good thing. It wouldn't be nearly as interesting if she turned back into Luna.
SWEET CELESTIA A CURE-ALL FOR MY CLIFFHANGER SYNDROME! WOOOOOOOOOOO! Now I just have to read it.
NIghtmare Moon is never going to go back to being Luna? BLASPHEMY! HERESY!
It was one of my hopes, but I also wondered how it would play out in the end if you did. Knowing it won't happen hasn't changed my interest in the story though. Do you have an idea of the number of chapters you plan on writing?
WooT for another epic chapter!
"this son-of-a-bee-sting (said in the voice of a five year old child ) can write when the mood strikes him."
Well Peppy, get in the mood more often!
Good, that Twillight and Rarity finallyhave talked! Good Chapter!
“The servant mare told me that you two were in the throne room, of course."
BEAUTIFUL FUCKING SAVE, GUYS! Seriously, with all of us crying foul over that, that was a very well done save. Also... Hehehe... Fertilization...
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Not sure if you get the pun or not... but you're close. I guess, maybe. I'll tell you when you get it.
Edit: And Red Cedar trees being in the shape of the assassins' symbol from Assassins' Creed was a total accident... that is, if I understood your comment correctly.
796819 yup but obviousely the shape should be a good indication of what the pun means also i cant beleave the nerve of her parents but then again no wonder she was such a wretch. (heh plugging holes then releasing torrents) doesn't that fit her description perfectly? anyway i wonder how long till nmm decides to dispell the male phallous she has equiped?
796479 Ah. Okay. My mistake. Besides, for this story, I think I like Nightmare Moon better anyway.
two down!
now only and to go
ya know peppy i'd take that "she not ever going to be Luna statement" more seriously if you didn't troll us pretty much every other chapter. The trolling is funny sometimes, don't get me wrong, but it kinda left me cynical towards you.
Anyways great chapter, and maybe other future mane 6 visits, wont pinkie pie be a laugh.
Oh man, this was absolutely lovely, though no comment from rarity or spike on her new cutie mark brand? Still absolutely loving the feel of this one, and glad spike finally got to see twilight again, even if he can't stay that long... Though i can see Nightmare moon finding uses for a loyal baby dragon, and maybe even the rest of the element bears eventually if she can just bring them to her side....
Heavy has a few questions.
#1 Red...Cedar? What is that?!
#2 Could we get a picture of Twilight's new appearance? I'd like to see that.
Anyway, Grats Peppy for another great update of AFTN
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We demand more clop!
CLOP FOR THE CLOP GOD!
Also, sweet chapter. More Moon Beam would of been nice, but I can excuse that since we finally get the confrontation between Rarity and Twilight.
Peppy, you and your proofreaders are awsome.
I don't know if I should say what one of my deductions to how this story will end is....
nah.....
796492 No constructive criticism needed. Just your pure, unadulterated love and worship is necessary. And your soul. Let's not forget your soul.
796542 I dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Pinkie_loool.png 'd hard when I read that.
796645 I have no idea. At all.
796666 I try, I really do, but there are so many video games and so many stories to read, it kinda makes it tough dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Redheart_gasp.png
796691 I couldn't pull out all my cards, could I? You guys should totally pay more attention btw.
796860 Of course, Nightmare is best pony. Right next to Twilight.
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796935 Yeah, I do give you guys plenty of reason to not believe me dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Lyra_dealwithit.png , but I'm serious about this one. While I like Luna, I love Nightmare Moon and she will remain as such.
797409 Rarity wrote it off as one of the punishments Twi was talking about. I should have put something in there about it, but I didn't think of it at the time and it's not nearly as important.
797619 Check the comment pages back around when Twilight first changed. Morfonius made a damn good picture of it. She's taller now and has a bigger horn, but otherwise the look is perfect.
797639 There will be more. That's for damn sure.
797642 Yeah, yes. Yup. It's all true.
797729 Go right ahead dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Bonbon_gaze.png
797771 Hey Peppy, if i were to go find the picture, Which chapter has it?
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This pleases me... dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Twilight_Sparkle_lolface.png
*starts work on chapter 5*
I'm somehow missing the times when Nightmare beat Twilight up and raped her, only taking pleasure and giving pain in return....
*Shooes Lumi away with a stick.*
Bad Lumi, no perverse comments!
797793 Uhhhh. One sec. The one where Twilight came back or a couple chapters after that. I'll have to go look as my memory fails me often.
797850 Ahhhh, yes. Those were good times. Perhaps I should write a side chapter at some point where I flesh that out a bit.
797834 Woo!
>Nightmare is never, and I mean NEVER, going to go back to being Luna.
I like this story and all, but sometimes it just breaks my heart.
797793 Chapter 19. Just minus the starry stripe and her cutie mark is the same. Darker hair too. Gotta love Twi's 'shooty' look.
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Hmm... More brutal dom NMM?
Rapist Twilight would approve dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Twilight_Sparkle_lolface.png
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Yes, please do... wasn't there something about Twilight being a masochist?
*Pulls out stick again*
I have to leave, bye.
797975 It was somewhat of a gag. She isn't a fan of being beaten, but having her hole stuffed to the max until it was somewhat painful, yet still pleasurable, brought up those thoughts again.
797955 Yes well, nobodies perfect XD.
797771 And it's only going to get worse with Halo 4, Black ops 2, Borderlands 2, and so many other awesome games coming out!
798112 I stopped playing Halo at Halo 3. I won't be playing BO2 and I dont want to play borderlands.
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That's basically the difference between being into BD/SM, and enjoying rough play. Twilight seems to be at the point where, her mind has gotten so used to her body getting hurt, that small amounts of pain bring up memories that she now find very pleasurable. If I had to hazard a guess, I'd say she'd be fine with the idea of getting smacked, spanked, maybe even having a crop used on her. However, she likely wouldn't be interested in getting cut, flogged, or branded (obviously).
She seems to be in the area where she enjoys pain with her pleasure. Where an act that would normally be pleasurable, if it becomes painful, would just excite her more. If she had her way, NMM would be having trouble walking around with the size of her, erm, 'equipment'. Of course, considering that NMM seems to not have a problem with indulging Twilight's new perversions, we may see things get even more freaky.
Not that I'd mind one bit. dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Twilight_Sparkle_lolface.png
Of course, all this is just the way I see it....
That and Slaanesh is controlling my fingers at the moment.. dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/shrug_Twilight_Sparkle.png
798137 With how hard she came from being plowed by NMM, I think it's somewhat obvious that she enjoys it a bit rough.dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Twilight_Sparkle_lolface.png
798143 She is always wearing the dragon horn. Now, I want you to imagine her not being able to fully clean Nightmare's scent off the piece. Now, imagine her walking around every day with Nightmare's scent constantly filling her nostrils and arousing her.
Her eyes are still the same color. When she gets emotional, angry, or needs to assert authority, her eyes 'shift' red. It's something like what Nightmare and Fluttershy do, but isn't nearly as controllable.
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Should pay more attention!? That's it. I'm tearing the next chapter to pieces. LITERARY. PIECES. Words will fly.
798164 I forgot the dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Fluttershy_umad.png
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If I ain't mistaken, I believe her eyes are normally purple, though they now look more like NMM's in shape. They turn red when she's angry or very emotional. Again, I may be mistaken, but that's what I seem to remember.
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Ok, this just popped into my head....
NMM: "From now on, court shall be held in my bedchambers."
Everypony else: "Um, why?"
NMM: "Thanks to my consort, I can no longer venture to the throne room without getting friction burns in delicate places."
Twilight: dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/shrug_Twilight_Sparkle.png
798173 So true. I will say, however, they did dispell the penis, but remade it considering they would be bucking in public.
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You know, I've heard being struck with a burning whip can be quite pleasurable (in real life... real pony life... real, real pony life... you know what I mean.) At least when the participants are careful and know what they're doing, otherwise it will get really painful. So, I think that Nightmare has experience with whips, and as much as she'd been able to torture Twilight with a fucking burning whip, she could also convince Twilight of trying it again in a more pleasurable way.
Anyway, what you suggested, spanking and being stuffed to her max, was what I meant, nothing as extreme as branding... again.
798190 Yeah. Twi is definitely brand-shy now. For sure. Anyhoof, I'll have to get around to making a 'past' clop chapter somewhere
“Well, I died.” Damn, I just love it when someone drops a line like that
797793 there is also a revised one in chapter 26
798162 awww, I just have to wonder how she will survive such a dreadful punishmentdl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Twilight_Sparkle_lolface.png
You know...I think I enjoy reading the commentary as much as I enjoy reading the story.
799043 Read the author's notes. I put in my aging system there. Ponies live half as long as humans and therefore mature twice as fast.
799679 I enjoyed it myself.
799729 I don't think I could. With my raging hard-on from the scent of NMM? I'd have no bloodflow to the brain and die.
799789 By commentary, do you mean AN, or comments? Cause I enjoy both.