Nightmare Moon survives the Elements' power and takes Twilight as her prisoner. Now, the alicorn queen must establish her monarchy and defend her rightful place as queen against those that oppose her.
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And here it is guys chapter two! Hope you enjoy it as much as i had fun writing it!
Wow you read that fast. I am equally impressed. I hope the dark and such wasn't too much I want this to match Nightmare Moon's evil and such but don't want to send it into a grimdark type of story.
Interesting. I was wondering when something would happen to start Twilight on the path to becoming more than a (mistreated) pet to Nightmare. It would seem that it will be next time.
Seems about the correct amount of darkness to really show Nightmare as evil.
Oh man I just realized i didnt name the chapter. Failsauce. Let me fix that
Well atleast the royal gaurd were shown as semi effective for once.
Hmm what exactly can Twilight do here, even if she were to get acess to her magic I don't know if she would know any healing spells. Twilight may be a Red Mage in all but name but that doesn't mean she actualy knows ay healing spells.
Next comes the issue of would she try to take advantege of this situation or would her good nature kick in, better yet what about the very real possibility of a panic attack kicking in. Hell I'd surprized if a combination of shock and stress didn't cause her to simpaly freeze up, better yet this is the situation where the bystander effect is far far more deadly then it normaly is.
50438 I like the speculation and it brings me joy to be the only one knowing whats going to happen next for a fact. I do agree tho. I wish i could just come out and say it but it would KILL me to spoil anything.
Good show, good show.
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So far as what Twilight could do if she had magic, even if she does not have any direct healing spells she could possibly conjure up some (temporary) bandages. After all, a good bit of the magic she does in the show that is not simple levitation is transformation. (teleporting or otherwise getting the Queen to somewhere than has medical supplies would be another way, though unlikely as she is tired)
Without magic, she can go fetch first aid supplies or something. Yeah, if it comes to this the Queen's survival mainly depends on immortal alicorns not dying easily. Unless she convinces some other pony to help, though that would be rather difficult considering what has happened (unless that are as kind as Fluttershy).
As to what she will do, if she was just going to sit there till Queen Moon dies or is feeling much better then there would not be any real reason for her to be so baddly injured so far as plot goes. Based on her being worried by Queen Moon collapsing and the type of story we have been told this will be she is more likely to help than try to get rid of the Queen.
Speculation is fun.
Oh I agree that Twilight wouldn't leave her to rot she's not the type to do that but I would be shocked if she didn't briefly consider the possiblity given the situation she's been placed into. Then you have to consider the fact that even intending to help this is the very situation were fear, panic, and indescision will be facters at play.
Then you have the next problem even if Twilight pushes through the fear and keeps a level head there are two more issues at hand 1 does she know first aid, and two if so is she compitent at it? I'm clear for CRP and first aid in my home state but I pray I never come across a situation where I need to use those skills passing the class is one thing real world application is another entirely. Much as I find the whole twil botches a spell plot device annoying (Though granted it can and has been used well.) This is the type of situation where her ... issues with high stress situations can and will be a force to be reconed with.
Oh boy, I'm rambling again I'm going to shutup befor I stick my size 13s in my big mouth.
Cool story bro, and good cliffhanger to leave us on. Plus showing off some fancy magic to boot and make Nightmare Moon just the right level of Evil. Anyways I look forward to future additions to this series
52741 Thank ye. It always feels good to receive positive feedback I kinda enjoyed leaving it off on that cliffhanger. (insert sadistic smile here) Kinda one of my guilty pleasures.
To everypony: I'm going to try and get chapter three out tonight or early tomorrow morning. I can't make any lasting promises cause I am VERY easily distracted BUT expect it no later than tomorrow night since I dont work tomorrow and can work on it all day! May even have ch4 out Wednesday night
"torch sconces littering the walls every feet" - I'm thinking you either forgot to put in the number, or you meant foot
"the night of her temples destruction." - Apostrophe?
Does ~{A}~{T}~{F}~{N}~ mean "Aliens That Flap Noobishly" ?
Random tense change: "and has expanded greatly as it"
"None of the torches had been lit leaving the room dark." - I can has comma?
"the archway and the rooms sole window" -
"killing them on the spot leaving smoldering heaps as their flesh burned." - I think you should put either a comma or the word "and" between "spot" and "leaving"
"wrapped around the captains neck." - ...
Definitely gonna keep reading!
I still dont like how twilight is treated :/
Capitalization.
And I suggest starting to use semicolons.
Needs a question mark.
1510044 Maybe not. I can't seem to be able to edit anything. Weird.
Wow Twilight seeing the royal guard slaughtered is much harsher after the end of season 2, I had to check the date on the fic to see if the fact that her brother had very likely just been killed would be brought up in later parts. Almost glad that we didn't have that little tidbit of knowledge back then, would almost have been too cruel.
Captain... Aegis, you say?
...not sure if that's a deliberate cameo or not, but it was kind'a scary to see me beheaded.
Should be capit-a-l
2225998 Fixed! Thanks for the catch.
All should be "its", not "it's"
2226044 Only two chapters in and I'm sorry but I already am starting to not approve I see where this story will meet it's conflict and yet I don't see a proper climax but as a friend I will read more and tell you what I think. You have on one hand caught me at a twist full crossfire in my unknown curiosity what will happen to Twilight and Nightmare moon which is why I give you my "LIKE" I look forward to reading more after I answer and help other writers.
P.S What time is it where you live?
3013178 Wat.