Nightmare Moon survives the Elements' power and takes Twilight as her prisoner. Now, the alicorn queen must establish her monarchy and defend her rightful place as queen against those that oppose her.
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Ch 35 nameless till jekyll or i can think of one
The alternate ending seemed to be quite a strong choice.
What made you decide upon the one you used?
619633 Hehe. Would have, but we have more of that coming up later. Don't wanna spoil the pie by making it too sweet now do we?
Also, jeez. Don't even give me time to clop before breezing through this and commenting. Speedy lil bastards.
If you think you can sneak an update by us just because it's the middle of the night you are quite mistaken! Anyways, good chapter, Nightmare went a bit more ballistic than I expected there. She needs some anger management. Or cake, cake always works. The "alternate ending" did get a laugh out of me. I'm really interested to see how the Nightmare Moon and Twilight relationship evolves / where it ends up with its current state being so dysfunctional. Good job as always, even if I always lurk and tend to not comment like I should ;)
619658 I should know better than to be able to sneak one by. I can't tell ya how many times I've posted it at 5-6 am and gotten 47568765298356 comments in 5 minutes Ah well, a pony can only hope right? I enjoyed the alt ending as well, tis why I kept it in there (was originally a joke like with a few other things I've put in there but deleted out) Anyhoof, I'm beds now so check this shiz out later.
Well I guess NMM just has yet another thing that she has to make up to twilight... I wonder if her cutie mark will actually heal, or if it will remain branded over forever... because that would be something that both of them would have to live with. I want to see twilight just explode with anger towards nightmare. I feel like she just takes punches both mentally and emotionally and now she has literally been branded by the pony she loves. I also hope nightmare shows a lot more love towards twilight after these recent events...
And I thought I had seen NMM angry before....
I demand Moar. Also epic as usual.
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Sweetness!!
man I love this story.
Love it soo much that I was about to go to sleep for work the next day when I saw the update. I am gonna be tired as a bitch tomorrow.
welp, now I'm up to three stroies that I will give up sleep for just to read. XD
I knew it, they're already working things out...it just cost Twilight one of her Cutie Marks...ouch...
Nice alternate ending
nightmare moon approves!
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Alas the story must continue, for there are allies to be settled in, a war to be fought, and second mother to be announced to moonbeam.(which I am looking foward to the most ).
and Im sure we can fit a couple of "alternate endings" in the future chapters
Love is a complicated beast, it's concept simple easy to grasp, yet the deeper into it one goes, the more twisted confusing and confusing it becomes, like a maze where every dead end is an exit, and every wall is merely a speedbump to an ant
So Twilight called Nightmare Luna, any chance of her...powering down or whatever into Luna?
Luna's learning. Good, had you not had Twi fix this I may or may not have been annoyed enough to have Loyal slap her around. I'm no fan of wasted second chances. Another amazing chapter. Love it, need it. I'll be catching up soon though.
nice plot twist (insert rimshot here) I actually belived that nightmare and twilight were going to fight bravo keep it up
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Seeing Nightmare and Twilight actually fight would be pretty epic, but I think that would be hard to mend with noone there to stop them since it's always Twilight who has to stop NMM, which makes since. But now NMM fucked up again by killing all of those griffins and hurting Twilight even more, now their relationship might need mending and some ponies might still be pissed off at her. Good chapter, plus good alternative ending. I laughed.
Epic! All that can and must be said!
Reading the chapter backwards helps get through the emotionally difficult parts.
I love the smell of updates in the morning it smells like speculation.
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The return to caslte new mareland is every bit as dramatic and emotinaly charged as we had thought it would be. Just not for the reasons we had expected. I love how that the issue brought up between Twilight and Nightmare wasn't just cast aside. It was at the very heart of this chapter and I'm sure will have a long lasting impact on events to come.
Twilight and Nightmare's relationship has always been somewhat rocky. Weather it being that Nightmare isn't very willing to express her feelings, her quick temper and the results that tend to follow it. However twilight's uncertainty and niavity are often the cause of friction between the two as shown here. Had Twilight tried talking this out before they arrived instead of hiding in a supply crate this whole nasty buisness could have been avoided.
I can only guess at how the branding of Twilight's cutie mark will impact them down the line. I'm certain it will be a uncormfertable subject for years to come but i think that these two will be able to work past it given enough time.
I wonder just how badly Nightmare's little preformance here is going to affect things. Not just her relationship with her subjects but recall jahurl and his minotuar saw this as well. I can clearly see him starting to ponder on wheather siding with her is a good idea given this display of temper he just whitnessed let alone the branding of Twilight. Then again perhaphs he can stand to stick this out seeing the kind of influence that she has over Nightmare oon.
On a lighter subject i liked how Moon beam and cherry tart handled this matter. The return of Moonie's question about being a monster brings up that she is still somewhat insecure about the whole ordeal where her friendship with Cherry Tart was thrown into jepordy given the fillie's fear of griffons. granted she might just fear Nightmare mon more but that is an issue for another day and another wall.
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in short great work peppy and crew I can't wait to see more.
the nights true wrath.
moving to a better Queendom
part 3 initiate
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First Steps.
SUPER AWESOME ALTERNATE ENDING IS CANON I DON'T NEED THE REST OF YOUR RUBBISH-
Alright, alright. Brilliant as always, but I guess NMM's change didn't last as long as I expected; I thought she would hold it on a cliffhanger and be returned in the next chapter.
Then again, making one-and-a-half chapters on it without going stale in the middle can be fairly tough. Plus everyone'd be calling you by various profanities for doing it.
(Seriously, isn't the Alternate Ending basically what happens anyway? I'm sure it'd hurt a bit, thought, what with the branding.)
620311 Nope. Just a name. She will always be NMM.
621330 That made me lol a bit. And yeah, I can't just keep cliffhanging you people. I'm not entirely cruel (yet)
620885 This made me giggle
619699 620429 Who knows what would happen. It's true that Twi has just been tanking the abuse like a paladin, She did say that she was extremely angry and you have to remember: forgive, but never forget.
620224 Never seen any truer words than these.
619699Cutie Marks don't heal (not in my canon) As Nightmare Moon explained, they're a magical occurance that can't be tampered with else you risk injury. Just like how you can only have one cutie mark, they won't come back after they've been destroyed. In my canon.
620954 It's quite difficult to have a relationship when you don't express yourself (I know from experience considering I'm know for bottling my feelings both good and bad and being relatively indifferent) and, as you said, with Twi not just coming to Nightmare with her problems, it only made it worse.The branding will certainly be a lasting plot point. The elements, even though they aren't truly friends anymore (or at least Rainbow and Rarity) will have something to say about it and I plan on having her parents return at some point before the end (possibly in the next couple of Chs), so that'll be fun. Moon Beam is a filly and emotional trauma just doesn't go away, especially not for the young. She'll face issues with that for a while, but at least with her not being fully aware of her changes, she won't have to worry about it affecting her combat abilities. Twi will be sure to help her with it though. Cause Mommy Twilight knows what's good for itty bitty moon filly.
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So not even the Elements of Harmony could restore the mark as on of the extra effects when used?
Just seems like it should be possible, just really difficult such that there is no known way, so that it could happen to during some climatic moment later on (likely in a sequel).
621650 would that do anything to affect twilights special talent? Also that might be the worst thing NMM has actually done to twilight...
woah...NMM is...unstable (that doesnt really cut it...but i dont have anything better) and twi is beyond forgiving...
im looking forward to the rarity scene so damn much, she'll see a very very changed twilight, possibly still with the mark on her flank. and it does seem that her eyes start to glow red when she uses her magic (?), if rarity gets to see that as well....
Damn you Peppy! I was trying to read through the whole thing again on my new tablet, then you had to go and add another chapter of awesome-sauce to it, so now I gotta go through re-dowloading it to my tablet all over again!
How dare you force me to read such great new chapters, thus breaking my steady read of the old ones!
You should be ashamed of yourself for making me read this badassness instead of working on my own stories!
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Yeah, Im done being a troll now, I think
BTW, every time I hear that filly called 'Tart', it makes me snicker, cause of the other meaning of the word 'Tart'
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It sounds like Peppy has no plans to restore her mark.
621778 Not at all. As Twi said, it's just a mark to depict your talent and otherwise doesn't have any effects on a pony. If you lose your chef's hat, do you automatically suck at cooking if you were a pro?
621835 Her eyes glow when she's emotionally unstable (like when she was distressed over the killing thing), and when she uses Nightmare's stare thingy (although she still doesn't realize it).
621739 Even if it could (and I still prefer the idea of it not being able to be fixed) I wouldn't heal it. The Moon on her flank will serve as a reminder for both Twi and Nightmare in times to come. Very import 'plot' point. Hehe In both senses.
A bit to much flip-flopping from Nightmare if you ask me. Its getting unrealistic what she can get away with when it comes to Twilight, or at least with how little Twilight reacts to it. I mean, I know, she had to stop her here, but... Eh. I don't know.
622201 She's not getting away with it. She has to make amends. Just because Twilight forgives her doesn't mean it's all just going to be pushed under the rug. If Twi hadn't done what she did, Nightmare would have slaughtered even more.
You know, it just dawned on me. That scene where NMM looses it, and starts killing the griffons, I just realized what it reminded me of.
"Ever roll up the end on a tube of tooth paste? Zombie's head is the cap"
Man, every time this gets updated, I find myself glued to my computer screen and at the edge of my seat. I loveses this story!
And Twi very nearly made me cry...
624670 Twi has that effect on ponies.
Beautiful chapter.... Okay that might be the wrong analogy to use here, in relation to what happened I mean, but who gives a crap! Trixie doesn't
And seriously! I'm so looking forward to see how Rarity will react when meeting Twilight again!! YOU REALLY DON'T KNOW HOW MUCH!!!
Have a nice one!
625876 Only been like, what? A day? Shame on you that's too damn long! I've been wanting to work that brand in somewhere forever ever since she mentioned it.
625377 It's gonna be interesting, for sure.
i wish i could give you something to work with.. but all i have is this..
I LOVE YOU, YOUR EDITORS AND THIS STORY.
that's about it.
yeah.
:D
627138 Hmm.... Sexy Nightmare plot is certainly a great scapegoat.... You are forgiven!
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strangely enough i can eventually see twilight starting to like having nightmares brand of ownership on her after a bit.... talk about proof of her love for luna right there...... though it might take quitea bit for it to get to that point givenhow she acquired it.
oh... and Awesome chapter as usual!
631639 Hehe silly filly.
Peppy get your ass back to Necro Domina!
637810 I would love to, but writer's block for it atm
639200>>637810 sadly tis true once his writers block is gon he'll be back to the old 1 story perchapter montra he was going on there for a bit before it struck like the royal grand biv in dredgmane. now back onto everypony's favorit unicorn getting owned by the most beautiful alicorn. also i kno i've asked before and i'll ask again what are your plans for celestia exactly?
Right, now that I've taken over for Breach(he asked me to finish his stories) I really understand why he had notes in his computer strongly hinting towards his character beating the shit out of Nightmare Moon. Hmmm, rummage, rummage, good idea here good idea there. This will take me a while to sort out, but I may go with a more passive aggresive attempt for his story.
And I plan on Nightmare hating every minute of it. She reminds me of kids that used to pick on me and Breach(only she is learning I guess. At least thats what Breach's notes imply, meh, he was a nicer guy than me. I should worl on that.)
641456 You'll see?
Oh wow..... 190 thousand words huh o.o
I've got some reading to do here
Well I guess I'll go stock up on frozen pizza and mountain dew cause I've got some long days and late nights ahead of me
643941 sooo later then there will be more celestia? ... arrgh confound thee thou doest leave me in a state lacking the information i desperately desire. why must thou do these things?
this is the greatest thing i have ever read, first it was broken wings but it is now this, please don't go the way, this is truly great and I hope to see even more, also I was wondering, do elves exist since minotaurs do as well, because maybe you could have elves or maybe not, because you see from my reading, I estimated it would take 4 griffons to lift a minotaur, and since minotaurs are land based maybe you could have expert archers to shoot them down?.
anyway, I just congratulate you once again on this piece of literature and hope you carry on to the end, goodbye