Nightmare Moon survives the Elements' power and takes Twilight as her prisoner. Now, the alicorn queen must establish her monarchy and defend her rightful place as queen against those that oppose her.
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94510 Oh! The beating up of Moon Beam is probably not likely to happen. She is a demon in adorable form if you don't remember from what happened to her during the first encounter she had from the royal guards. She took a spear through her body, henshiin'd, then proceeded to fuck some shit up. Twilight would never have the chance to go berserk on anypony that tried to hurt the filly.
94514 I'm talking about the excecution
Does twilight even want to be saved anymore?
The way she acts I am starting to believe she really doesn't want to leave anymore xD
94516 Oh. Didn't reread the comment completely, just reskimmed the first 5 words or so But ya as I said in the previous one, not sure if that'd work. There'll be some stuff happening with Twi and NMM, but I can't exact divulge any secrets as it would spoil the story. Keep a watch out though. Never know what might happen.
94519 We'll find out, now won't we ?
94523
Lame :P
I would understand why she would want to stay though
94521 okay but how did we go from christmas to here? or was that not part of the story
Christmas was probably not fully canon, what with being a special.
Anyway I really like this, there's alot of "Goes crazy" stories but this flows so well and explains itself so well that the way
Twilight actually did what she did made sense, this is an epic drama, good job!
94528 It is part of the story, but, if you would read some of the previous comments, you would see that Ch. ??? was set in the future as a Hearthswarming Day special. It doesn't follow the normal timeline of the rest of the story.
94526 Can't be spoiling the... Plot line (hehe plot line) for anypony cause that'd be just mean.
94535 okay so you've put an obvius spoiler out then.
Yay more....the girls are in for one hell of a surprise
Please write more soon
94534 She's not exactly going crazy so much as she's traumatized. Kinda? I dunno it's kinda hard to explain.
94547 Hehe glad I could make your day brighter
94551 Well it's obvious that NMM/Twi are gonna get together. I never denied that and I also said this would have a happy ending. So that chapter didn't really spoil anything.
94555 That they are... I'll try and get another chapter out tonight or tomorrow morning or something like that. Be on the lookout
Ah, another interesting chapter i will just have to reread several times to savor every little detail
just can not thank you enough for all your hard work to keep such flourishing release schedule
and, um, get well soon ^^
So Twilight has PTSD and her friends want to save her while she gave up and just wants to be with NMM and Moonbeam. (and gave up on her mentor,celestia is disappointed)
Shes a total gold digger to anyone who can see it but cant know her internal thoughts (even then now its more gold digger-ish then was lol )
If Celestia returns it would be unlikely that Twilight could be her student.Twilight would be judged for treason and murder probably.
So there goes my hope for a return of Celestia huh.
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Actually, she would likely not be in too much trouble if Celestia returns. After all, that would likely mean Nightmare allowed her back / Twilight made her Luna again and they are going to make up. In which case Twilight has not committed treason as she was just supporting the co-ruler that was present.
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Twilight's not a gold digger, if she was she would be purposefully ingraiting herself with NMM to get special benefits no other pony would get. All she's looking for is acceptance and love, considering how she grew up, I can see how she would want such attention as time goes on. Anyways I do think she is experiencing stockholm's syndrome at a fairly large degree.
94718 Celestia hasn't done anything to anypony without good reason, she didn't exactly want to banish her sister but she did. With this information we can speculate that if Celestia does return she'll see the reasons behind Twilights choices and not do anything, she may even accept the facts that Twilight was only helping the current ruler of Equestria not only that im pretty sure if the guards had killed her sister Celestia would have gone insane and killed them.
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Theres still the death of ~10000 ponies that died in the meantime, you cant just say "oh well they died for nothing, lets ignore them" , its not like in the cartoon where no one died. There have to be some consequences.
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I said it looks that to anyone who doesnt know her internal struggle(so pretty much all others in the story? lol), but i think i remember peppy writing how the castle staff said that about her already in the past.
Hmmm I very interested to see if Twilight will ruin the entire rescue plan with her new found loyalties... Or maybe Moonbeam will... That would be interesting....
Oh well! Whatever happens I can't wait to see it!
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She does seem to be something of a gold digger from the outside, though given that nightmare was just as likely to buck her across a room and then forbid her from eating as she was to have a dress made for her to wear one would have to be the world's most dedicated gold digger to take that spot and stick with it.
Poor Twilight I don't see her getting over her night terrors anytime soon. Throw in the upcomming arrivle of her friends and things will just keep going down hill for her. I don't know what type of mental dissorders she should/does have at this point but I have a good idea as to why they are present. Failing her beloved mentore and friends (Spike being her closest second only to Celestia herself.) The abuse at Nightmare's hooves, Brooks emotinal manipulation, her almost maternal desire to protect Moon beam, guilt about Brook's death, and something that Peppy hasn't touched on but is probly in the corner of her mind worries about the safty of her parents.
Oh yes I can see Twilight becoming quite the mental wreck. Especialy given that she really only has Nightmare and Moon Beam to turn to at this point. While I doubt she gave up hope on her friends saving her she probly didn't like the idea of them coming to her rescue for the simple fact that nightmare doesn't like to share and doesn't play nice with others. If you think she's in a bad way now think how much worse off she would be had Spike or one of the others been killed or perminetly maimed in a failed rescue attempt.
For addeed fun even Twilight's own mind has seemingly turned on her. That deam we just saw is playing in a loop and has been doing so far days now. Look at what it contains, the dead tormenting her, her friends turning upon her and throwing the same insults upon her as Brook, and ironicly enough the approvel of the one mare she can attach herself to for support anymore. This support is given onely for distroying what amounts to Equestria's best shot at returning to it's orignal state via means of the slaughter of the frist friends she made after Spike and Celestia.
Though oddly enough Nightmare could most likely put an end to this by using her powers to grant Twilight a dreamless slumber. If Twilight was granted time and a clear mind she could sort out her feelings and take some pressure off her troubled mind. Witch could only further endear twilight to her, while Twilight is less likely to take affection at face value anymore (Save for Moon Beam but really that Filly could charm Stalin into a decent person.) but with evidence that Nightmare seeing her as something more then just a pet, prize, or lacky she would be more willing to invest herself with her new ruler. Granted she has already commited her loyalty to Nightmare seeing something of returned feelings and respect would go a very long way.
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Out of respect to Twilight's fragile state of mind I'm putting that tired old running joke to rest for good.
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And Celestia would have her self to blame; Nightmare was weak when she arrived so Celestia had to have allowed herself be banished.
94902
Have to agree (she didnt want to kill her sister since shes not like NMM) but im still a Celestia fanboy
94902
hmm so maybe this is all part of her plan?
that nutty trollestia
Testing Twilights abiltiy to help the new leader by sending Waves of soldiers to fight. Risking the life of her own sister just for a test.
Or its also possible that
A. Celestia is actually relaxing and resting after 1000 of years resting and controlling both son and moon.
B. the guards are not actually following HER orders, only what they assume to be her orders.
C: if they are in fact following her orders, then why has she herself not arrived to deal with stuff or send word to any of the Mane 6?
I wonder what celestia would say to Brook about the way she acted? I can see her commending her loyalty to a point but I can't really see Celestia wanter her sister ans prized student slaughtered in her name.
On a diffrent note hey peppy I know you said awhile back that nightmare is in controll here but I'd like to know is Luna still within Nightmare's mind or has she been locked away unknowing of all that goes on around her? Also thanks for the little shout out with the Moon beam smash line.
94576 Haha thank you I try my best. And thanks again. I just cannot seem to shake whatever ails me. I dunno wtf it is.
I enjoy all this speculation. It makes me extremely happy to be writing to be having you guys contemplate what's going on and come to your own conclusions. My writer wing-boner is at maximum extension
I will agree with 94902 on the being Celestia's fault. It's the same as how it was in the show. She let herself be defeated when she knew that the elements of harmony would have found new recipients. Sure, she might not have expected them to fail (in this fic), but with her power she could have EASILY done something to help. Thus the origin of
95210 My pleasure. That Bolthouse smoothies thing made me giggle every time I saw it. And Luna is still in there just like she was in the show. She 'knows' everything that is going on just like in the show (or so I'd like to assume). She just can't control anything that goes on with 'her' body.
And I seem to have forgotten to put the shout out in the author's notes. *facehoof* yay being sick and tired. I'll go fix dat shiz
94565 oh but it did because honestly I was wanting to see NMM be on the reciving end of a kamehameha
95245 Not quite sure what ya mean by that.
I'm not sure but I'm guessing he is bringing up the possiblity of Twilight getting fed up with how Moon Beam is being used as an extra cute, seemingly inocent WMD. While I could see that happening before( and Twilight becoming little more then a memory if she tried it.) Given her desporet state of mind post Brook betral I don't think it'll happen. Right now she's to hurt and confused to really do anything other then latch onto whatever form of support and affection she can find.
Heh as much as I love those expencive little buggers it was time for the joke to die, I was using it like the infinet 1up trick from the Mario games. Well all this aside I hope that you get to feeling better soon Peppy.
95391 Ahhh. That makes sense, but yeah, Twilight won't try and do that anymore. She doesn't want to lose the only support she has.
And thank ya. I hate being sick with a flaming passion.
Okay! Chapter 14 is in the works and I'm going to try and get it out before work tonight. First, though, I need some sleep as I'm still recovering from being sick. If, for some unknown reason (me procrastinating with vidya games for example) I don't get it out before work, it WILL be out soon after I get home. I apologize for the wait, but being sick just saps any motivation you may have
On a side note, I just got a new processor for my computer and one of those AWESOME Twilight Sparkle pillows from Toys'R'Us so I'm in a good mood. Also I'm going to sleep very well tonight in my My Little Pony sheets and comforters hugging my new pillow.
100350 Don't let the first part fool you. It IS MoonLight shipping. As Gwen said, it doesn't happen right away. It helps build character!
100350 It also helps if you read the comments for each chapter. After you've read the chapter of course. They DO contain spoilers, but I'm pretty sure I've said a few times that it's definitely a MoonLight shipfic
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Yes! Moonlight! I love moonlight! I should've trusted you.
100386 Hehe see? Just gotta give it time. I'm not a fan of Mane Six x OC shipping. I know sometimes it's hard to choose a character for shipping outside of mane six x mane six so its occasionally acceptable, but I'll only write stuff like that if it's to further a plot. Like this! Otherwise it's only gonna be OC x OC or Mane Six x Fanon/Canon/Mane six.
100394
Up to chapter 9 now. Not sure how much longer I can take NMM being a complete bitch.
Okay. That got much better, really fast.
100440 Hehe, you forget that NMM is the embodiment of all things negative in Luna. She is definitely a bitch. It DOES get better though.
This is great so not to push you but i hope you update soon since reading is the only thing i can do to various physical disabilities but it has been brilliant so far
'learned a few spells from the canterlot nurses" -
"Rarity, Apple Jack, Rainbow Dash, Fluttershy, Pinkie Pie, and Spike were all slumped" - Applejack is still not amused
"Princess Celestia's personal protege" - protégé
100394 Heh... plot...
Nice chapter. Moon Beam was a surprise, still. It was good how you used her in the story, yet I can't help but dislike her greatly now, not for what she did, but her motivation. Petty jealousy like that seems so... childish a reason to risk so much. Although, people are known to make big messes out of the smallest things...
Overall, a lovely chapter. I'm eager to see where it goes now that the first battle has been won.
369013 Do You mean Silent Brook? I don't remember Moon Beam doing anything out of jealousy in that chapter.
*Keeps reading, choosing to be a rude jerk by not leaving a proper comment so that he can keep selfishly reading*
AH THE FEELZ ps:i hope twilight stays with nightmare moon
whats all the hate for silent brook are we fan fic readers pre disposed to hating oc"s. she didn't betray anyone she was loyal to celestia and infiltrated NMM in order to kill her she sacrificed some of her own men to gain trust but its war killing NMM is top priority any and all tactics to get to her are valid
" I am a man after all."
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You are a dragon!!
2712653 but you forgot the fact that she mostly did it for herself. Remember, she said she would finish twilight off once she was done with nightmare moon to get her title back. On top of the fact that twilight didn't even do anything wrong! Sounds pretty self-centered to me...
I didn't think i could despise a character anymore than I despise Twilight right now...