Nightmare Moon survives the Elements' power and takes Twilight as her prisoner. Now, the alicorn queen must establish her monarchy and defend her rightful place as queen against those that oppose her.
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Great Chapter, War is coming to Equestria... but so is Winter sorry couldn't resist a Game of Thrones reference
MOAR!!!!
Moon beam makes me smile
I just read through all of it. Great story, I love these kinds of "what if"- fics, and this one has really earned the [Dark] tag and mature rating. I kinda wish we saw some more of the rest of the mane six and their plan to rescue Twilight, but Twilight's life at the castle is just as interesting to read about. Judging by the direction you're going now, shit's about to go down.
Aslo, she may be a shapeshifting monster, but Moon Beam is freaking adorable
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ALSO. *sigh* How I wish this site had an edit function
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It's that time agian!
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Well first off it's good to see Nightmare Moon is taking some action to secre her position of power. However if she wishes to keep her throne brute force alone won't be enough she's going to need to work out the logstics of how this war is going to work. For example aside from Cloudy how many of her gaurd are actualy going to be worth the cost of the barding on thier backs? what about supply trains, and maitinence of equipment, magical support, airela supremicy? However as vital as all of those are right now I'd say her biggest issue is security. If she's going to keep her throne she'll need to be secure in her own bedchaimbers first. If that's going to happen then she'll need to plug the leak that's been letting in the assailents.
Now that's intresting Nightmare is really rather stubborn about revealing anything about Moon Beam. Granted given how much she cres for the little filly i don't blame her in the slightest. Also it's good to know that she didn't turn a blind eye to how well Moon Beam is taking to Twilight and if she's smart she'll notice just how much Twilight is attaching herself to Moon Beam as well. And for some forshadowing here we see a slight glimps into Nightmare's thoughts about her pet and how she is affecting her. I bet not even three chapters ago had twilight tried to press an issue like that she would have earned herself a lashing.
And abit more development of the relationship of the damned. While I enjoy seeing the growing affection between these two its hard to ignore just how much of a knive's edge they are treading upon. Still for now they are being careful enough coded knocks, only breif respits and keeping up a good poker face. So while the sands in the hour glass are slipping away atleast for now they have eachother and provided they are careful enough they might be able to keep this up for a while longer.
Cloudy is intresting so far, a former royal gaurd who has been embittered twoard her old leader and is now serving her userper instead. Maybe it's just me but I'm getting some R Lee Ermy vibes from her, also I find it kinda funny that she seems able to resist Moon Beam's epic level cuteness factor, shows just how deadicated she is that she could take that kind of distraction and brush it off without so much as a daw. I wonder how she'll react to seeing Twilight though queen's pet or no I wonder she she wouldn't suspect Twilight of being a threat.
A storm is comming, it will be brutal, it's effects will be felt across all Equestria but the question stand when the skies clear will the brillent sun shine through or will the the moon shroud all in it's silvery light? Okay I'm waxing poetic now I think that means it's time to end this ramble.
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79567 There will be more about the plan in coming chapters, but right now the stuff going on in the castle is more important. And yes. Shapeshifting demon filly aside, Moon Beam is the cutest thing since Fluttershy with a Juice box in a sweater.
79761 Nightmare Moon is the monarch of Equestria. She can direct the flow of money to herself (as she has shown with the obsidian castle built in a little over a month) so even if the new recruits aren't worth the barding, she doesn't really have to worry about that. They will, however, be trained well seeing as Cloudy is pushing them. These first uhhh 200ish? I don't remember are just the beginning of the army she's going to amass. SPOILER ALERT
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She'll figure out who's letting the ponies after her life in very soon.
If you noticed from Moon Beam's description of what happened to her when she met Nightmare, you'll see Nightmare was terribly worried about having almost killed her with that magic (hence the description of her expression). Yeah Twilight is getting to her (with some help from the tiny ball of adorable of course), slowly, but surely.
They are being very cautious. They know Nightmare Moon would pretty much kill them if she found out even considering they don't know about Nightmare Moon's shifting demeanor towards Twi.
I'll be completely honest. I've go no idea who R. Lee Ermy is, but Cloudy is a tough cookie. You can expect little Moon to continue her siege on the castle walls that is Cloudy's heart cause that little bugger is too damn cute to just give up amirite?
My thumbs are up
"Meh I probly botched the spelling of his last name so I'll give you some hints. If you've ever seen the movie Full Metal Jacket" R. Lee played the Drill Instructor in that movie. He's also hosted the TV show "Mail Call" andhad a brief appreance in an episode of "Scrubs" among many other such projects. Befor his work in show buisness he was a real life Drill Instructor in the US Marien Core.
If Moon Beam intends to keep up her siege on that fort she'd do well to rembore that bribing you way in tends to work better them storming the walls.
As form Nightmare's reaction I can understand that. While i don't doubt that she was cruel back before she was sealed I don't know if she was quite as bitter back then, 1000 years of solitary will do a lot to mess with your head up. Though between Twilight and Moon Beam I'm sure she'll be able to pull herelf together and maintane a cool head.
79953 The combined force of adorable and adorkable shall melt her icy heart! You also underestimate the pure adorable powers of Moon Beam. No castle has a chance against her prowess. And I've seen a few vid clips of that guy. I guess it's pretty similar then except she's a mare instead of a stallion.
Wow this is amazing I've read something similar um I think it was nightmareds don't last or something very similar but not so dark.
Hey! great book so far. I ended up deciding that I wuld rather not risk my alredy tampered mind and forget bout chapter 8.2 so I didnt read it and by not reading it I think I was saved from a horribly huge amount of mental scars and trauma so yea... well anyway loved it and I am gonna go so I can watch DN Angel, so.... BAI!
81356 lol thank ye but as mentioned before in the comment the only similarity between this and NDLF is wgo's being shipped and that NMM isn't purged.
81722 whats NMM?
Well, I just spent a couple of hours and burned through the first 9 chapters after preparing one of my own for posting. I'm really tired or I'd read more of this right now, haha. ;D
I love it when a plot is plugging along at an even pace. Cloudy Horizon seems like an excellent addition, and I do like take charge ladies. The way that Nightmare Moon's view of Twilight is shifting and her slight leniency towards her gives me a glimmer of hope for them.
"I shall have your captains armor crafted" - YO DAWG, I HEARD YOU MISSED AN APOSTROPHE
"much slower pace that the castle had" - Did you mean than?
You forgot the opening quotation mark for "Maybe she views me as family like you?"
"A Purple plate helm" - Random capital!
Yo Dr.Jekyll! It's dangerous to stay awake for that long! People have died (true story)
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WOOHOO! Time to keep reading! Huzzah!
I'm sorry about this, but...
"Then I woke up with Mommy Moon!"
›Rape
crap i had some good input but it got deleted so when i remember what it was i will tell you
367741 No one has ever been reported to have died from lack of sleep in a timespan of less than 10 days so, nothing to fear yet
I have been ignoring other errors, but this one is too annoying:
>picking there beds
I know NMM said that she had a solution to the eternal night climate problem but has she mentioned it yet?
edit: nevermind just read the first paragraph of the next chapter.
I dunno about that Silent Brook, something is off about her.