So the next chapter is up, and I hope it gives you a good impression of what to expect from the story!
I really tried focusing on character this time, with some dialogue and the such, and if any of you got a problem let me know so I can edit and improve!

So when publishing a new story a writer hopes for some feedback.
Seeing as is my first story Neigh Orlean nights was going to get flack, especially since i'm taking a beloved a great sub fandom and universe, and applying an idea which for some is less than savoury.
I don't mind people dis like the story, i just want people to tell me why so I can improve it.

So c'mon, help me out here.