Ok, so I know this is like the third blog post I've posted today It's currently 11:30 pm but Celestia damnit I did it! I fixed not only the flight sequence but a few other errors. Go have a re-read of Red Mist Descending, which I've renamed to 'Dogfight' as it fits it better.
Right, and on that bombshell. I'm going to bed, have a read now, or read it later, whatever works for you.
Hope you all have a swell night, and I'm going to... sleep or something.