Okay, so I was going over my story looking at some of the comments and stuff, and I read through them and I just realised how many errors there are. Or just how bad I am at writing. This is to be expect however, considering I don't have an editor. In face I hardly even go over my chapters and re-read them, so if anyone can suggest an editor that is willing that would be great.
Also if anyone can give some tips on writing and hopefully plot build-ups that would be awesome :)