I not sure if anyone really reads these blood posts but right now I'm looking for a temporary proof reader for my story "Rise of an Empire, Fall of Another"

I don't expect a real following for my story "Rise of an Empire, Fall of Another" but I do hope to get constructive criticisms to help improve my writing style and maybe make the characters in the latter chapters (for example the princesses and the mane 6) more believable so I can write to the best of my ability.