I got the rejection I was expecting, but unfortunately, I don't know what I'm supposed to do to fix my story with what I was given to work with. It's all plot and dialogue related, but I don't know how I'm supposed to fix it. I want to make it have a happy ending, but it seems to be impossible for me to do so. If you know anyone who is really good at editing and giving advice, I'd highly appreciate it. I want this story to be as good as possible.

But not many people are reading it. I was probably spoiled by the quick reception of my previous story. Anyways, if you're curious, here's the link.
Falling Down
It's a sad story, just a fair warning. Anyways, I hope you enjoy.