hi I am yuu and I finished my second fic,the problem I write at English for a first time and I don't know if I make a good that for what I need somepony who can help

my story name is the secret Life of Aurora

resume: In summer sun celebration night, Nightmare Moon she freedom on his banning spell and she continues his goal to conquer Equestrian.For stopped her Twilight and his friends going to the Forest everfree to searching the elements of harmony.Aurore Sparkle the adopting sister who be worry about something happens to her big sister go to the Forest too but when she arrives the young filly meet a fiction character

this the link good drive https://docs.google.com/document/d/1gJo4pFlyJ3mq1hmNQM99tb4p58tqKFlKvg6yKUhYj6s/edit?usp=drivesdk