G'devening Indie Authors. Venter here, with another generic "Please review my fic" thread.

My story is thus: The Ballad of Jack and Sylvia: an Equestrian Odyssey

The story is a Human in Equestria archetype, with two humans as the protagonists: A brony (or pegasister if you prefer) by the name of Sylvia, and an 'anti-brony' named Jack. At first I just wanted to explore what it would be like if a brony and a pony-hater both ended up in Equestria; over time though, I've decided to make it a proper adventure-fic. It features both romance and tragedy, although the latter element has yet to properly take root.