Sep
5th
2020
Reguarding the style of Phoenix · 4:31am Sep 5th, 2020
So, more and more as I think about it I feel like I want to redo Phoenix from another world. Not hugely. But changing from third person to first.
I just feel it would read better and be more engaging. Not to mention it would feel a little less awkward to write. The only downside is we may lose some scenes from other characters. I want to get an editor to help with the transition so we can do the best to keep those scenes.
I just want the input of those who care before I start doing this. I don't know how long it'll take but I won't redo it chapter by chapter. I'll redo all the chapters when they're all redone.
If it'll help you continue the story I say go for it. First person has plenty of challenges though, it makes exposition that much more harder to make feel natural instead of an info dump. Specially when you want the world you're creating to shine through, that might create a steep extra hurdle.
Having that in mind the challenge might be just the thing to motivate you more, as also having a first person narrator makes the entire thing way more personal. Dresden Files does it, and I've got to say I love the series. Just have in mind that the entire thing will always be seen through Sunset's point of view so many things might never get mentioned simply because they wouldn't be important to her. But that does also open the possibility of things happening without no explanation ever being given, if your chosen narrator never finds out about then/cares enough to notice.
Either style can make for great stories, find the one you want to tell this one with and we'll be here to read it
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Thank ya much for your thoughts.
My big thing is that this was inspired by isekai stories and I've been reading a LOT of light novels recently and the thing I keep noticing is that it's in first person. It feels better and is less of a slog to read. I also think it would be nice to have more things sunset and the readers don't know so things like Maria accepting her would be more sudden and surprising. Like you said, it has it's challenges but I think it would read much better as a story.