feedback

I have posted a second story on Wattpad I would like your feedback as it is a new idea I had I want peoples feedback before I post it here
https://www.wattpad.com/story/233947217-homeless-princess

After a fight with every pony that almost killed Shining armor and left cadence paralyzed Twilight is left homeless what will Twilight do. will ever pony forgave her if she apologies or will they be angry with her forever