I'm writing another thing.

Hey all 2.3 people who follow me, and or have the slightest interest in what I do. I'm writing another thing, and I am going to try to make it much longer, but no promises on that. I'm going to try expand on the things I tried in my previous two stories. Hopefully, or rather assuming I'm not completely incompetent, there will be an actual character arc, and growth.
Basically I'm just saying this to ask, "Hey, did you see something in the other two stories that I should try to improve on?"
Again, I'm not promising I'll release another story, and I'm definitely not promising it will be good. I'm just hoping that I can improve at a semi consistent rate. Anyways, here's a short little piece of what I have written so far:

“You know where I’m at if you need anything.” Whiskey made to leave but stopped when he heard a small noise. He looked back to see a small pile of bits on the counter, much more than the price of a single beer. He cocked an eyebrow, and Berry simply nodded in response. Sweeping the bits into a small coin purse he had around his waist, he muttered his thanks and resumed cleaning glasses on the other side of the bar.