What it takes

I greatly lack skill in the area required to make a story, I know all the elements needed for a story, it's just I don't have the ability to use these elements the way they should be used. I can still make a story no doubt, but whether or not it's good is completely determined by the critique I get from the readers, when I say critique I mean i want you to give me everything that is wrong with it, like the flow or grammar or that there is a detail missing and something needs to be put in to make the story good(you don't have to say what to put, but just say there is something missing and give me a general area of the missing info). I am completely horrible at personalities, at best I can reflect a little of the original characters, I'm sure I fucked Flutters personality, not completely, but still. In the case of the colab the one chapter i had to type out I feel is missing a lot, not only should it have been longer but the grammar was pretty bad, and I believe I failed at putting any important personality defining things about my character except the anti-social bit. Observer was more than likely being nice about it cause he didn't want to offend me. I would be writing a chapter right now but I can't think of anything to put down, i just sort of half-assed the last one because someone was disgruntled by the fact that people don't post as often as he wants them too. In fact I've completely rewritten that chapter 3 times on my comp since posting it and I am unsatisfied with each result. On another note, LOL I have 5 followers and I'm making a blog post like people care what I have to say. Another note for haters...