Looking for Proofreaders · 1:49am Jan 18th, 2016
Hey there. Another post for something interesting! Today I've got a small request: I'm looking for people willing to read through a short story I've nearly finished about Starlight and Twilight.
Working Title: What Lies Beyond the Dance
Tags: [Dark]
[Comedy]?
[Random]?
[Sad]?
Description: Starlight can't be defeated. But then again, she can't win. Both she and Twilight and trapped in an eternal time loop. After realizing this, Starlight alters her spell to transport Twilight and Spike beyond time itself. Unfortunately she's dragged in as well and taken to the place where time ends. In that endless nothingness where even time is meaningless and realities merge she and Twilight find...
Celestia, Discord, and Chrysalis playing cards and betting on the lives of mortals. And it's not as funny as it sounds.
Anyways I'd love some feedback on the story which should be done tomorrow. It'll be ~5,000 words and I'm just looking for basic typing errors and feedback on what parts are too long or bording, whether the description isn't engaging, what tags I should add, etc.
I also have no idea what picture I should use. I hate coming up with the story pictures anyways.
