Quick Story, If you need something to read. · 12:11pm Aug 10th, 2012
So yeah, I was browsing the web yesterday and found a picture on Equestria daily. A picture that actually made me quite sad. So I wrote a very short little story.
Please read if you want to.
A Change Of Pace
The alarm clock chimed with its usual annoying tone, I rubbed a hand over my face as I knew that my “guest” would undoubtedly have been awakened.
I exited my bathroom and walked back into my bedroom. I turned the alarm off and turned towards my guest. To my surprise, she wasn’t as startled as I expected her to be. She simply looked at the clock with a rather sad gaze.
“I’m sorry it woke you, I forgot all about it” said I as I sat down on the bed next to the sad… female.
She lifted her head and looked at me; I couldn’t read the look of her eyes. They were filled with so many emotions; Sadness, Hate, Sorrow, Longing, Fear, Desperation… and a hint of gratitude.
“It is quite alright… I was not sleeping anyway” she turned to look at the little flower that stood in the windowsill. Her mossy green hair still touched the sheets.
“You keep thinking about your subjects, don’t you?” I asked with concern.
She didn’t break her stare at the flower.
“I just feel so alone…” Tears started running down her cheeks. The look of her made my heart ache.
I placed my hand on her holed foreleg. “You not alone… I’m here and I will do everything I can so that you can return to you own world” sincerity was strong in my voice.
She turned to look at me; some of the sadness in her eyes had disappeared. She didn’t speak; she just looked at me for a while.
But then after a few minutes she pulled herself closer to me and slowly embraced me. With her head resting on my shoulder she began sobbing heavily; I could feel her tears soaking into my shirt.
I placed a hand on the back of her head and one on her back. I whispered it would be alright, I whispered that that she should just let it all out.
And she did. She cried her heart out; unrestrained sorrow resonated from her lips and ran down her cheeks.
After a couple minutes her cries had stopped, but we still sat in the embrace.
“Thank you…” she whispered lowly in a grateful voice.
“No… Thank you… My Queen”
The End?
Quick little note : I am a big Queen Chrys fan, I'd love to read stories were she finds "real" love since that seem like something that a little rare. All i find are stories were she is this evil (sometimes Murderess) parasite, somthing my head canon can't and won't ever accept.
Okay i've rambled enough. You have a nice day now.
Mil Spec out.
That was a nice short story!
Although I cannot say I share your enthusiasm for Queen Chrysalis, I can see your concern about her only being evil in stories.
Someone should write a story about why she became that in the first place perhaps... That would maybe be, what you are looking for.
Nice short story, it should be written in a normal lenght if you ask me.
is very nice
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keep it up man
Nice short story
279080
I’m glad you liked it, I’m planning on giving her an origin story in a later fic were its explained why (I think) she acts like she does. It’s off Couse going to have a happy ending since I’m a sucker for sugarcoated happiness stories.
He he det føles lidt mærkelig at svare på engelsk
282465
Helt i orden :D
De andre skal også have en chance! xD
And I'm also best with suggarcoated endings xD
279209 I don’t think I could make it longer, even though i would love to make a story about Queen Chrys, but at the moment i can't really come up with a plot that would be interesting to read.
Plus I still have a few other fics that need my attention.
But still I’m glad you found it nice.
280039 Thanks Random im glad you liked it.
284338
Well if you find time and inspiration for it, I'm looking forward to read it!
284370 Well I am planning on giving her an origin story in a later fic were its explained why (I think) she acts like she does. It’s off Couse going to have a happy ending since I’m a sucker for sugarcoated happiness stories
284779
Well if you ask me, you should not do that, as there are several other stories doing the same.
No, the short you wrote was what every reader need: a story using a character who got somewhere, we don't know where or how, and the things get revealed through the story!
Long story short: expand the one-shot, write more and abandon the background story idea.
I think you can do it.
284782 hmmm okay i might, but no promises
And about her Origen its not a fic about her specificly, but she'll paly a villan role in it. Can't say more
lastly thanks for your encouragement
284820
Anytime! And you just gained a follower too!
284823 O MA GOD YES EGO INCREASED
Thanks man, i hope that i wont dissapoint
284827
How could you, that short was good enough for me to read it AND comment on it (and that's something), so you'll do a great job!
284832 Your too kind, but thank you, really thank you.
reading a message like that really leaves a good felling
Just to be curious what kind of fics do you prefer?
284841
Well mostly comedy, sci fi, HiE and alternate universe.
284847 nice to know. i see you're a writer yourself, wanna recommend one for me to read?
284869
Well, If you want to read a HiE story what is placed in somewhere else than Ponyville, then read the 'Tear of a flower'
If you you wantto read my background story then read the 'memories of Zephyr' to the 11th chapter
If you want to read a one-shot with NMM, then read the 'Was it a Nightmare... Moon?'
If you want to read crossovers with other stories then read the MoZ from the 12 chapter and the 'Not So Royal Guard Anymore'. (Both of them build on the MoZ and other stories.)
I hope this helped.
284881 oh it did and hell i might just read all of them
284886
I hope my writing quality will be sufficient, I'm Hungarian and english is my secondary language, so there must be fails everywhere, even though all of them are proofread.
284892 Dont you worry I’m a Dane so I don’t judge. If the story is good then I don’t really care about spelling errors
I’ll just read a line twice if I don’t get it
286901
That's good to hear!
And of course, have fun!
286904 Oh i will. im Printing "Was it a Nightmare... Moon?" as im writing this
286915
Printing?
You mean you create a physical form for it???
EXPLAIN!
(I don't understand!
)
286922 Im looking after my brothers house for a couple of days and he does not have internet, so i print a few stories and take them with me so i have something to do other than staring into the wall
So yes a physical form has been made
286960
Oh wow, you honored me!
I hope the story will not be a disappointment though...
286979 Im happy you feel that way.
I'll give you some feedback tomorrow okay
286995
Alright, thank you very much!