TheExperiment · 12:01pm Jul 13th, 2015
So, Pedro Hander has started an experiment, and I decided to partake.
The idea is to change a few words in a small story he posted, and repost it. The best version will recieve an artwork by him, as well as some free publicity.
Rules -
- You can only change the underlined parts.
- Don't be a dick.
- Post the rules.
- Post the tag, so I can track this. #TheExperiment
Let's see how far (and how creepy) this thing can get.
The Foundation was a secret government institution, and they loved to experiment with our pony friends.
They had a big, unmarked building, but a gigantic underground cell block to store their subjects. Apple Cider lived in a dirty, small cell in that block, near Ponyville. And he was the only pony they had not yet turned into a monster there.
The ponies outside were completely unaware when Apple Cider was rubbed with cleaning alcohol to prepare him for the next procedure. And they all would follow him eventually.
Well, that didn't get a lot darker than the original.
This was written for fun in ten minutes flat.
-GentlemanPirate
Wow.
I like that, I truly like that.
I mean - you even managed to jump over the 'rubbing' part.
3234519 Thank ye!
-GentlemanPirate