A few notes

Alright! I think I have had about 6 viewers now with two whole comments! That means I get to put up the blog post about how my story was amazing and all bad reviewers are evil right? Well in fact its not. Instead its time for notes to myself and to the readers! First the ones for you guys.

1.I like the help you guys have said already! In two comments I learned that I messed up on quite a bit! I am glad for the advice though.
2. I realize now that I should have developed the setting a bit better, and I really should have given a bit of exposition on the fact that, while I am taking inspiration from various notable writers in our community, I am not writing in any of their specific universes individually. For example, I should have stated there are quite a few differences in my story. In the world I am writing in, there are only 12 conversion bureaus in the entire world, they were massive processing plants rather than the friendly little homes of Chatoyances universe. And that the economic fallout entailed a global war. Possibly I should have filled out a few more paragraphs about how the human population depleted so quickly, and as to when Equestria even appeared on earth. So on that part, I will be rewriting the prologue to better reflect that.
3. I saw that one of my first reviews stated that the characters were bland. Well, I find that the characters only seem that way because you haven't really gotten to know them yet. At their essences I think they are good characters, but I will bethinking how they portray themselves.

Anyways I give a great big thank you to everyone who has read my story thus far, and I hope I can improve in the future!