I've finished chapter one of my first story! "Yay!"

Well, just as the title says, I've finished chapter one of my first story, "Whisper's Protection Spell"!
The first chapter basically revolves around Sweetie Belle and Lyra Heartstrings. Lyra isn't actually an "important" character in the story, I just needed a background pony, someone not from the main cast, to explain things to Sweetie Belle. The whole story doesn't revolve around Sweetie Belle just to let you know, there's going to be loads of Scootaloo, Apple Bloom, and the kids in the class. Heck even I'm even planning for Diamond Tiara and Silver Spoon to be in it.
I'm not sure how much of the main cast will be in it though, Rarity and Apple Jack and probably Rainbow Dash will be in it because of their connection to the CMC, I have a feeling Twilight will be in it, because we need a little bit of magic to spice things up a touch. Fluttershy and Pinkie will say things in it, but this story isn't really about them! :)

Anyway, it's my first story so any CONSTRUCTIVE criticism is allowed, but if you're rude to me, then you'll be blocked, please comment if you have something nice to say though or some tips! :D