New story now going through moderation

It took way too long to write it, but my new story is almost out. Its definitely different from ASOIAP, in fact since it won't have the base views that ASOIAP got because it was a crossover with a popular series I don't think it will get nearly as much attention. Its a crossover, but with a much lesser known book series. Its my first step into Dark/Comedy, so I would love feedback on what works and doesn't work. I have a feeling it won't be perfect, but I'm excited anyway.