Can anyone give me an opinion on a WIP?

First paragraph from a might-be-clopfic-might-

The wind howled outside. A combination of slack on the part of a certain rainbow haired pegasi, and an unfortunate formation of dark cumulonimbus clouds had brought about one of the angriest storms that the quiet little town of Ponyville had ever seen. Twilight Sparkle slumped against her desk into her book. As much as she loved the sound of the rain smacking against the window, the cacophonous whistling of the wind between the door frame prevented any state of concentration. She stared out into the blackness, as newspapers, umbrellas and Derpy Hooves sailed down the road, buffeted by the wind. Standing from her desk, Twilight trotted downstairs and into the kitchen. Perhaps a coffee would give her the boost she needed? Granules hit ceramic, as Twi created a small flame to boil her pan of water. She sighed as she slumped her back against the kitchen counter. There was nothing that aggravated her like her procrastination, and that study of a Scylla and Charybdis wasn’t going to finish itself. A bolt of lightning bathed the room in a quick flash of white, and as Twilight peered through the soaked pane, she saw the weather team struggling to remove the clouds. The town was in it for the long haul.