A Small Change to Chapter Two

Well, I went ahead with it, so I figured I should probably detail some of the changes I have made to the ending scene of Chapter 2: Promises, Confessions. In the previous version, I didn't have a clear idea of what kept Celestia and Luna divided, so to speak, at the time of writing. It was up in the air, so I went with something close to canon, but a little angstier. Suffice it to say, that has changed, and my perceptions of their characters in this AU with it, as evidenced by the way Celestia behaves in Chapter 6 and beyond.

It bugged me that Luna's reasoning was essentially 'boo hoo, our creations hate me', which made her look rather weak for a goddess, in my opinion. It also bugged me that Celestia was rather unrelated to Luna's problems, and her angst basically boiled down to 'woe is me, for I have neglected my sister'. Again, it felt weak when placed against the Celestia I portrayed later on.

I have essentially expanded on the guilt Celestia originally showed, and gave a little insight into her feelings over the 'fall'. Luna is more conflicted, and argumentative, than previously imagined. Celestia is almost unable to comprehend a world where her sister does not trust her, and it shows. There's little bit of world building that has been expanded on somewhat (more on this in later chapters, unless something goes badly awry in my plans), and overall both alicorns are more emotional than before.

I heavily recommend that you go ahead and re-read chapter 2, as it still contains some interesting tidbits and implications involving the events that lead to the present... situation (for lack of a better word, but really, not much has changed in continuity. I am aware that some may dislike this change, but I felt it was necessary, since that one scene really seemed odd in light of the characterisations and background events that I settled on in the end. Little bits of it may be referenced if Chapter 10 is written as I plan it to be now (not a strong guarantee, trust me on that), but for the most part, nothing much has changed. Luna lurks in her tower, Celestia is guilty, both are torn up over the past. And the chapter still ends the way it did before, with two alicorns falling asleep under the stars. It's just... more.

Lastly: this won't be a regular thing. Just in the event that something really doesn't look right to me, and if it's minor, I'll leave it to a later rewrite. It's definitely something I do lightly. What are you still doing here? Go look at chapter two, philistine !