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Thank you, this is my first piece of creative writing since elementary school, it turns out to be a lot harder than I thought.

291339 Alright then. In the mean time I'll go through the chapters you've already completed and make any corrections as required.

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English is my first language, I just have a bad habit of not proof reading things sufficiently.

I would like to take you up on your offer of proof reading, I will contact you when I have the next chapter done.

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It's good (Obviously, hence the fave... :P). The concept, while nothing new, has enough of a twist on it to keep it interesting. I'm looking forward to seeing how the cold war dynamic plays out. I also like that you chose not to have the ponies speak English - That they always seem to in stories like this strikes me as lazy writing and leads to boring, predictable interactions. Even I could churn out a basic "paint by numbers" Humans in Equestria (Oh Mah Gawd) story that's been written a thousand times before, it's the little details that make it actually worth reading. So well done on that front.

My only gripe would be that there are a few minor typos and spelling errors. One that I remember off hand is that you used the word feint (meaning a trick or misdirection), when you meant faint (meaning "pass out"). Would I be right in my guess that English is not your first language? I would be willing to proofread for you if you'd like.

Anyway, keep doing what you're doing. I will be reading.

Thanks for the fave, what do you think so far?