Nightmare Moon's returned and Twilight captured. In order to survive she must sacrifice everything
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Okay, I'm going to be totally honest here, I was originally going to write Pinkie's section in this chapter, but I did not expect AJ's section to drag on for 6,000 words or so. I mean, holy cow that is insane. Talking about AJ's bit, it was really hard to characterise her this chapter as I had to keep her slightly unhinged with her remembering things she really shouldn't, but still very much sane and not screaming at people. At the same time, I had to balance that against her being slightly OOC with her breaking Twilight (see what I did there?) and somehow keep her in character enough. This section was very much written to be a mirror of Chapter 22 where Twilight did the whole "You are not friends" rant. Now, whay is AJ the way she is? That will be explained next chapter, but a hint was already given in the previous one.
Oh, and Trixie gets the Element of Magic. Originally, the plan was that she'd get it in the middle of an epic showdown against Twilight, but as you can clearly see, things changed. Writing her this chapter was an interesting experience to say the least.
Finally Twilight's obligatory scene. This one was majorly short, but we finally find out where Celestia's been kept and it ain't pretty for little Twi. Is it cliched? Yes, I'd say so, but I'm hoping the emotional impact from it all would sorta offset it. I also tried to keep the emotions on a more minimalist scale I suppose you could say. I tend to go off into long descriptions and I wanted to bypass that to show how Twilight is just numb from shock really.
Other than that, I cannot wait for the next chapter. Trust me. If it's got the scene I want to write in it, it will be epic.
Kinda surprised Twilight didn't heavily consider the possibility of that before. I mean NM was in the moon.
so aj's been mixed with twi's memories and also twilight has been completely broken i think and hope. also i think aj has also been broken and is also enhanced with some of twilights memories and thoughts. o and also i wonder how pinki's doing? aany way till next chapter
cheers
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Giving Trixie the element of magic is the only thing I disapprove of. Other than that, great chapter!
903200 Yeah well if Twi wasn't a friggin nut job then I'm sure she would have kept it with her, do you not agree?
Was half expecting NM to walk in to Twilights room at the end, sit by her and explain what a fool Twilight was to ever think she had a chance.
902991 Agreed with you on that point. My guess is that she didn't want to consider that possibility as it would render everything she'd done useless so she deliberately/unconsciously blanked it out of her mind.
903200 Well if Twilight stayed sane (and actually had friends) she probably would have kept it.
903970 Oh great, now I want to write that scene once the entire fic is done as a 'humorous' aside.
i rekon next chapter when twi attacks the base she is going to surrender herself and not fire a single bit of magic .
also another great chapter keep it up
In the sun? Luna's revenge
That last part.
Well, this is... Alright, I guess.
It's not terrible, but honestly, the earlier chapters were much more enjoyable.
These chapters are a bit... all over the place.
I don't think I'll hang around, but thanks for the read.