So, second chapter and hopefully with less mistakes than previously. An important thing to note is that this chapter is as gory as it will get, though it will get darker (in my opinion). As always, feel free to critique as harshly as you desire.

Finally, thanks for all the fav's and stuff!

Ah... the infamous urine bit. Well not infamous because this story isn't very popular but still.
Made my stomach churn the second time too. Oh, I forgot that she licks the bowl. Charming.
Good job.

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You're never going to let me live this down are you?

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Nope.
and think, this isn't even the worst this series gets in terms of "What the hell is wrong with this author?"-ness.

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The sad part is that I agree with you

Urine isn't healthy at all. It has very little nutrients and filled with waste. There's a reason the body gets rid of it.

And having a lot of salt is reason enough to not drink it. Its the same reason you don't drink seawater; it will dehydrate you.

Normally I wouldn't really care because you can't expect people who have been tortured and are dieing of thirst to make the most rational decisions and it could have easily been just a thing NMM did to torture her some more, but Twilight started talking about how it was ok to drink and how social conventions were the only reason not to.

But all that aside, it seems like an ok story so I'll keep an eye on it.

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yeah, and it's not just that you hate Twilight either, but the other characters all experience a bit of the old personal suffering and what not too. Oh just thinking of those Fluttershy sections makes me shudder a little bit.
To anyone browsing the comments before reading the story take this as a warning: This stuff gets dark, if you haven't figured it out yet, and it's not for everybody. But for those of you who can live with seeing these characters go through some real heavy stuff, then you're in for a treat.

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My bad, I remembered my biology wrong, it's only sterile until it reaches the urethra so you are entirely correct. Can I chalk this up as a deliberate mistake on the part of Twilight? No? Damn. But thanks for pointing that out, I'll make sure to double check any facts like that in the future rather than going straight from memory.

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Hush you, stop giving away stuff. No warnings you hear?

Mother of god that is vile.

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Thank you! (Yes I am taking that as a compliment) And I'm assuming you're refering to the urine drinking?

758798 That and the torture parts as well. and although an odd one it was meant as a compliment seeing as that's what you're aiming for anyway.

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There's a lot of stuff I could give away isn't there?
But yeah, you're right, I'll avoid spoilers.

Well then. Been a fan of your previous writings and I've been meaning to read this one for a while.

I must say... this is.... interesting.

This shit aint even surprising to me anymore.

1.21 gigawatts?!
Also, how does Rarity skim through all of Twilight's journals and notes AND master a spell to disguise herself in a couple of days? Besides her special talent isn't beauty, it is finding gems as shown when she tracks down a gem filled rock.

i learned the hard way not to eat and read this story... oh dear celestia ...

"The reality of the situation...Gaia have mercy on my soul."
Yes. Yes! YES! Finally someone is bold enough to take on such a radical viewpoint. This is the whole path that Severus Snape took (is this even a spoiler at this point, the book's been out so long). Everyone goes "yeah, I understand it" but no one has had the bravado to take in on. To really get knee deep in the muck and portray it from the agent's side. One who willingly stains their soul in the most blasphemous of ways so that others might remain pure. I can't tell you how excited this makes me. I don't normally do this, but right here, right now, in the second chapter of the story, this is getting a favorite. And I haven't even finished the chapter.

758677 4th or 5th run through. And still makes me Ick. The rest is fine tho.

Why doesn't NMM just use a memory spell? Anyhow, I love this story. I feel bad laughing and smiling throughout the torture scenes though great work!????

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In all honesty, this might be one those cases that back when Luna still ruled alongside Celestia, certain, more delicate, forms of magic hadn't been invented.