Nightmare Moon's returned and Twilight captured. In order to survive she must sacrifice everything
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I had far too much fun writing Silent Spell in my opinion. I really wanted him to 'speak' despite being mute and without using words you know? And I'd like to think I managed to accomplish that in this chapter. Interestingly enough, the Twilight vs Trixie scene was one of the first scenes I had conceptualised, but at the time it was vastly different. It was meant to be a massive magic duel with spell being thrown every where, but as you can tell, it was vastly toned down in this version as Twilight doesn't wish to kill anypony using magic. Instead I went with her slaughtering everypony and spamming teleportation. Overpowered much?
Next we had Applejack and Fluttershy sharing a scene. Not much to say really other than showing some character interaction, explaining AJ's truth powers and so forth. The Lyra bit was something that poppped into my mind one day. After all, in this conceptualisation of Equestria standing on two legs is very difficult, walking on two legs considered impossible as was balancing on one. And then you've got Lyra who's whole fandom revolves around being obsessed with humans. Put the two together and you get one of the few ponies who can fight on two legs like a human.
Pinkamina was extremely fun to write. I wanted her to come across as more than just being crazy and so I wanted everything to be a new experience for her. She was curious about everything, how it felt and so forth while not really being limited by anything. Another short chapter though much to my annoyance, but one I felt worked.
Finally came Shining Armor and Cadance. Raise your hand if you expected that one. Why no tags after speech? I wanted their voices to imply their actions and the mood behind everything and I wanted to add that extra layer of mystery by not showing where they are or what they're doing. All you know is that they're heading into Tartarus, but it is entirely possible to figure everything out with one (or two) assumptions as everything else is already in the story.
And one last thing, dear Celestia the plot threads. I've got waaaaaay too many plot threads going on at once. My bad.
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You just cut and paste your AN into the comments didn't you?
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Of course I did.
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Why not just leave them on the end of the story?
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Dislike that. Since this has a comment feature I prefer putting it there as it makes it seem even more optional than before
FimFic uses a different command line for italics it's an i in [] not <>
i take it that twilight is no long the element of magic now
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Crap! I knew I forgot to change something. Thanks for reminding me, I'll do that now
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No comment on that one
he he well the only other way would be that they both are and twilight is letting her borrow it
You might want to fix your formatting. FIMFiction uses BBCode, not HTML. I noticed that your rate of typos lowers considerably the further this story advances. Did you get an editor when you were half-way through it?
Oh dear lordy, FINALLY someone incorporates Tartarus into their story. That has to be the most underused source of grimdark in this entire fandom, even though it has a shitload of potential. I can't even begin to tell you how disappointed I was when the influx of Tartarus-related grimdark fics didn't happen. I'm seriously looking forward to the next chapter now.
Also, I flinched at the mention of humans. That's the one thing I don't want to see anywhere in any MLP fanfics, with only a handful of exceptions.
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Huh? I should have fixed it already. Yeah, on my computer screen it is using the right code... And no I did not get an editor actually, probably just me getting better at editting?
Agreed. I wish I use Tartarus a lot more, but in fact I don't. I'll probably be saving that for some future story idea or something.
Sorry then, but I'm 90% certain this is the only mention of humans in the entire fic.
and one chapter closer
I can only think of this for the Twilight section:i2.kym-cdn.com/photos/images/original/000/140/531/5880f256df28799b1cb838d25fbf2830-d3ivn99.png
(minus rainbow, plus twilight)
7710381 RIP in peace, Earth.
I was wondering where shining and cadence were.