Nightmare Moon's returned and Twilight captured. In order to survive she must sacrifice everything
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This chapter was ridiculously hard to write, probably the hardest to date and I decided to go out on a limb with AJ's scene so let me know what you think. Not the best chapter over all and full of mistakes probably. Now for the ramblings!
Trixie's section is pretty boring. It's mostly showing what Twilight wants to do with the Element of Magic and revealing she fully intends to take it back when the time comes. It also shows Trixie trusting her new found friends slightly more and willing to give them the benefit of the doubt.
Next is AJ's section and wow. That was probably the most interesting to write. We find out Phantom Celestia has been hijacked by Gaia and Twilight proceeds to show us all just how totally insane she is. Torturing a pony is one thing, but messing with their soul? I really wanted to take things up to eleven with that scene. Also, had the lyrics in there with the song so let me know what you think about that since it's me going out on a limb and trying stuff out. If enough people dislike it, I'll probably edit it out.
Rarity's bit was me showing that despite finding out Celestia had been hijacked, Twilight is not more sane as a result, if anything she is more insane. Especially once Rarity accidentally breaks her even further. Somehow, I've managed to make Twilight even more insane. Somehow. Rarity does sound very off in this chapter I shall admit.
Fluttershy was complete introspection. I wanted to move away from Twilight as there's only so many ways to show/say she's insane so instead I wanted to look at Fluttershy's issues in depth now that she can't hide behind her disguise. It is ever so slightly depressing in my opinion especially if you get the hints to her past that I threw in.
Shining Armor was basically to show RD and the family finally reunites. A very bittersweet affair as they realize just how much Twilight has changed.
Finally Pinkie Pie. Originally she was going to be above Shining's scene, but her chapter ended on a cliffhanger and that's where I really want to pick up from next chapter. We find out the true meaning of Laughter as well as what's wrong with her and some possible theories as to how it happened.
oh my gosh i've been waiting soo long for this chapter to get up and now its finally here aanyway i just cant help but grow an evil little smile at the scene where twilight finally meats her big brother and cadence its just so hilarious seeing them break down so thoroughly when they realize that their thoughts that twilight would be safe while they were gone were wrong and dashed in the most absolutely horrible way possible. not only that but shining was lucky enough to have his quick draw shield at the ready or he'd be dead and so probably would cadence. and this is probably the most crazy part. i just loved every moment of the torture. especially the blatant you let me down so i'll just show you the consequences of it o and hi by the way did you know their are two Celestia's the real one and the one bound in my head. i just bucking loved it plus the fact that twilight realized that the celestia she had was fake and that gaia was the one controlling the fake the entire time. then aj got her soul ripped to shreds pinki's still stir crazy and flutters is somewhat back to normal but still scared out of her wits without her disguise. rarity's probably the only one that's passed besides Rainbow Dash. and finally twilight is definately not ready to run into the real celestia.
cheers bro
dude this chapter is the equivalent of literary crack i don't know how but it just is.
Can't wait for more!
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Yeah, Shining's section was interesting to write and it was fun dashing his hopes for Twilight being safe. AJ's section was the only section I liked truth be told and probably the section I spent the most time on. And yeah, Rarity and RD are probably the sanest ones out of them all though Fluttershy comes close now.
897255 o yes and that was some awesome music you chose captain kudos to you i bet you loved tearing apart aj's soul. then patching it completely to her element which i can see will probably backfire miserably at some other time cough cough namely when discord arrives. still cheers
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I tend to dislike song lyrics in stories, but you can't understand the lyrics anyways and it fits with the whole "ancient language" vibe. And I did love tearing her soul apart, it was so much fun!
897308 so how long till we can expect your next chapter? cause i wanna see more broken twi and especially a tone of extra nmm will she remain the main villain or will that change... nvm i wanna find out that part myself later.
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Updating tomorrow then weekly updates from then on out unless I'm super busy
897382 woot alright thanks bro.
897382
yay
Okay, what in the bloody hell did Twilight just do to Applejack? Even though I don't know the result, I loved that scene.
I ran the foreign quotes of this chapter through a translator, and as far as I can tell, it's either gibberish or bits and pieces of different languages jumbled together. I'm not a professional cryptographer, so could you please spare me the trouble and just explain what, and how you wrote that?
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She messed around with AJ's soul.
It's from NieR sountrack (which is a game soundtrack). Basically the singer made up lyrics by basing them off existing languages by using similar sounds and phrases. If you listen to the song then it sounds very much english, but very much incomprehensible. The lyrics in the actual chapter I found online then modified to fit how I heard the tune. So, in terms of your question, I have no clue what I wrote and what it means and I doubt the actual singer has any clue either.
Link is ded
If I remember correctly it was this
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Wmc3yji0G84