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So now they have discovered fire. Cool!
pastel pony make big fire! Stay back, keep cool!
These foalish ponies with their dreams of prosperity are playing with fire.
Another huge step that will help in winter, and maybe against the giant spiders. Well, as long as they keep in in control. I hope nothing happened to Glum.
Aw, he's got a lil sis too!
7885240 What do you mean you hope nothing happened to Glum? He's just fine.
7885708 mostly he ran off in maybe giant spider infested woods by himself. Yes it turns out the noise was Mare's but still that was a boneheaded thing to do.
7885828 He didn't run off. He just slipped off so quietly and surreptitiously that no pony noticed until he reappeared behind the mares to keep them from running off. If you reread that part you will notice he is mentioned several times after he vanished.
What's wrong with a group of maturing(?) colts capturing random mares in the woods?
Would they be calmer if they would see a non-winged mare flying about?
Mirage Shimmer: "Okay. And I was afraid they would decide of your fate..."
And I'm sure this end will lead to an very interesting story.
Can't wait to read it!
Good chapter!
I think Glum was pretty cool...uh...cool headed.
When will we meet any unicorns and see what they're really like?
what exactly is soft step burning?
7887693 She is burning exactly a small pile of sticks. I didn't mention what was being burnt because I was writing from Ash's point of view and his total ficus was on the flame itself and not what was being burnt. The next chapter will go more into that aspect of the fire.
7887474 soon.
7888031 i look forward to that ^^
Well that's a twist
A nice warm and fluffy chapter.
Dark has a little sister! That's just adorable.
And here we have the lost sibling plot twist!
Really loving this story so far, enough that it kept me up until half past one in the morning and caused me to be tired the rest of the day... and feel it was totally worth it.
Quite the rapid progress these ponies are making. Then again, if you start literally from nothing then anything new is really new.
Good pacing too, and I really like how you approach the love scenes here - not paying them too much attention, neither too little. Just like everything else, it's a part of their life, and the way you write it perfectly reflects it.
Also Celestia should really talk to someone about how she feels when anyone else shows interest in Ash. That's not healthy.
So, a lost sibling? This will be interesting.
Can't wait for more
7895560 Wow, thank you for your kind words. You have just made my day.
Cut the "to"
Cut the "have"
side WITH the colts
Continues to intrigue how rapidly they're advancing into the social norms we're all familiar with from the show.
Cut the "is"
through THE group
Mighty Oak'S
Only need one "didn't"
Damn. Ash makes for quite the presenter.
This kid's gonna get someone killed someday, probably himself.
Dove'S
if HE would
7900573 Thanks for pointing those typo's out. I'm still amazed at how these things keep slipping through no mater how hard I try to catch them. The third one down isn't a typo though, that one is fine. Got the rest fixed. Thanks again for your sharp eyes.
7901823 It's my pleasure. I know it sounds weird, but me pointing out all the typos is actually a sign of how much I like a story.
7895560 Only 1:30am? Amateur
Sweet fire and a lost sister? Awesome
Talk out a(n) oat seed
:3
Greenhoof didnt say anything. :P
So Sunset and Celestia are related
9925196
Sorry, but no. Mirage Shimmer isn't an ancestor to Sunset. It's just a coincidence that the second part of their name is the same.