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I was wondering when there'd be an interesting interaction like this! This chapter is one of the reasons why I like this story: There's a good amount of stuff going on outside of the bedroom. Now it's a matter of keeping content balanced.
If this story ever comes to one of the better possible endings, I wouldn't be surprised if Pinkie (and/or Derpy) have a hoof in it.
Good work so far; keep it up!
Since a number of them have made appearances in the story, I have tagged the mane six.
I love this story so much. All the characters are great and it's just a joy to read.
Also, what does Guilty look like? I've been kinda wanting to maybe draw something for this but I don't think there's a description of him anywhere in the story...
Fuck... That shit was intense!
That, was, AMAZING! Best chapter so far. It was just so, intense, so varied. Really feeling for Guilty here. And Derpy, Derpy is always awesome. Just so sweet that he can have one client who is neither ashamed of being one, nor treats him as anything other then a friend.
Glad to see this story keeps getting better, can't wait for the next update.
I am liking this story more and more, some very good character development, and seeing a more intolerant side of AJ was very interesting.
I think this chapter actually did better because you didn't have to shoehorn in the clop content all that much, which, combined with the fact that more and more of "Guilty" is revealing of himself about his character, is very cool. I hope to see more soon!
Also nice work on keeping things consistent with Zecora, I have seen way too many fics that feature her start out by using her natural speaking cadence, before getting halfway through a conversation, saying "FUCK IT" and writing her dialogue without Zecoraspeak because it is too damn difficult.
This story is epic. I love it so far. Anything that really gets down in to the character's heads and makes them 3-D. Very well done!
One minor error I noticed in this chapter. In the paragraph about the radish pony, you state in there
I think you meant and of course abour her radishes.
Keep it up!
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Nice catch... fixed.
There is only one thing that your story needs:
more views
1977017
Same with mine. Maybe it's because I don't have a lot of chapters. Or clop (yet). Or I just suck as a writer.
wow...
i'm not one for oc stories
especially male ocs
but i want to read more of this
1977017
Agreed
HoLy SHIT!
It took me a good minute to recover from that almighty god of insults. Son of a BITCH did he ever mess up AJ's head there. Damn!
Now we get to see what Guilty's like. The little snippets here and there about him have been good, but I want more.
Also, Applejack is a bitch
Does is this story have some sort of planned ending, or is it more of a "I'll write when I come up with some thing" deal?
I mean... WOW. i didn't see that one coming... at... all. I mean that even rattled my mental cage. I do wonder how his trip to the library will be.
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I have an ending in mind... how I'm going to get there... well that's another matter.
1982162 pulling an Eiichiro Oda ey?
Damn guilty... That was damn harsh, I'm a mean person when I'm pissed, but I would never dream of taking it that far, that just ain't right
I've come here to read some generic clop. Now, I'm staying for the plot.
Guilty is a really interesting character
I really enjoyed reading this, Derpy cracks me up. She is so casual. I like AJ's bitchy attitude too. I look forward to more.
1997084 was the rhyming on porpise?
2007282
Just a small coincidence
2007282
Not technically a rhyme.
He called AJ a bitch!!!! good job sir.
Ok, I know that Applejack was being to harsh on him, but I don't think he needed to say something that bad to her. It was kind of a dick move on his part. At least Guilty realized how much it had hurt her.
2015818 But then again, one has to realize how long her harassment has been going on. I mean, everyone has their limits. That may have been uncalled for, but come on! He has to stand up to her sooner or later!
I'm really beginning to love this story. Oh yes. I just finished chapter 4. This story is excellent. I love it. The barbershop scene was excellent. The bit with derpy too, and applejack. Hell, the whole thing was pure greatness. You really, really know what you're doing.
The special ability to read people and notice the little nuances of life, I assume? would explain why he knows how to best attack a person, or best show them a good time in the way they prefer...
I'm going to take another short break, but then i'll be right back to reading. This is a great fic, I truly love it.
edit: oh, and I wanted to say: I think it's epicly awesome that you've got derpy in the whole "I don't need to hide my power-level because my mind is high tier enough to handle what society thinks about me without letting it bother me" with regards to her usage of Mr. Pleasure's services, and being open about it in public and shit.
Close Shave might be the greatest OC in the history of the fandom.
His bag lost ten pounds by the end.... Applejack?
Good story none the less. Can't wait to see what's to come.
Brony on!
Guilty is now my new favorite.
awesome story. hue hue hue i am sure AJ's Father killed himself of the shame , hue hue hue
This is brilliant so far, I really like the story and the perspective!
Okay yeah...this really makes me nervous. I really love this fic. I love it because it seems to be acknowledging that sex workers are good people, that they don't all come from horrible messed up places and even if they do they can get past it and be good people. That they're not Simply doing it to get back at their families or some garbage. That they can be therapists and care and be good folks, but this...this worries me.
Where I come from stud is used to call someone sexy...
Oh god, why can't I stop hue hueing?
Where are his bits going, in Manehattan? Maybe a wife and child? I hope not... don't think you blitzed that past me, that was probably the most important thing in this entire chapter. You give us so LITTLE about this character's personal life-- that particular tidbit stuck out like a searchlight.
2760657 when they started to fight i was just like, "kill her! I fucking hate Applejack! Just punch her!" i so hope he gets Derpy!
AGH! These characters! The mysteries surrounding them! I NEED to know more!
Your story is making love to my brain!!
Carrot Top is in love with Derpy...isn't she ?
2757545 But in regards to a horse, you're calling him a breeding animal instead of a sapient being.
Applejack should be capitalized.
Sometimes you just need to tell people to fuckoff... maybe not in that harsh of a way but it seems that she had it coming.
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You said it sister!
You have killed me.
You know, it's weird how things pop out on re-reading.
Since the first time I read this I started travelling for business and got my hair cut at a barbers across the road from the hotel. They included shaving my sideburns and neatening up my beard with a straight razor as a standard thing and I'm with guilty on this, it is genuinely amazing.
Aj really earn this verbal punch
Element of Honest... Yeah... Right...
Great story
I laughed.....quite a bit here....
https://youtu.be/8zyBpKyWu-s
Poor Stallion has a very harsh time... AJ is a bitch...
I wonder how long until she get help. Qhat she is pulling in not ro excuse. She needs seriouse mental help.
For all the heavy themes, this story is really likeable. Hope you continue!