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You DO know there are seven chapters, right?
Another great chapter. Yikes, but CT's emotional life must be EXHAUSTING to balance.
No wonder she's a grump.
2234634 And the seventh one is pretty danged good. Keep up the good work, man.
Oh lord, Im loving this. Well done sir/miss, great writing, wonderful premise, awesome story.
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Sir, btw.
Ya misspelled derpy.
Also, another fantastic chapter. Bravo!
Yay! Another awesome chapter, especially with more Derpy!
Oh Carrot Top and Close Shave, you so crazy.
You know, I'm actually enjoying this, not just for the obvious reasons but because you actually give us a reason to like the characters despite what they may be doing! Nice work!
A couple of random words in there start with capital letters, unless there's something I'm missing. Also, Guilty called her Carrot Top once and she only seemed annoyed that he was talking to her at all, instead of referring to her by the fake name she gives him.
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Random Capitalization is an old bad habit of mine. I guess it's rearing it's ugly head again lol. Once I get a chance, I'll fix it.
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Thanks for the catch, and fixed.
I honestly don't care what happens to his job or what, Guilty needs to date Derpy! They're practically made for each other!
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Would you like me to downvote you, finish reading, and then upvote you?
Yet another great story. Quite a few grammar & spelling mistakes in there, but nothing too egregious. Certainly worth overlooking them in favor of the developing story and relationships. it might be a good idea to find yourself a grammar nazi to do some pre-reading for you in the future though.
It's been a little bit longer than normal so I'm glad to see this story get some more love. Looking forward to the next chapter Magus.
Splendid chapter, I enjoyed reading it immensely. Go Derpy&GP!!!
Another great chapter dear sir
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Feel free to point them out and I'll fix 'em.
i freaking love this story.
Thank you Black skulls for pointing out a whole bunch of errors.
So, I've been reading every chapter of your story so far, and I've thoroughly enjoyed them all.
There was this one little thing in this chapter that I reacted to though.
At the beginning of their hike, Derpy fell off the edge of the gorge and ended up flying upside down. Guilty started laughing.
When Depry finally managed to land, Guilty said the following: “Sorry, but you have to admit that was pretty funny, right Carrot Top?”.
A slip of his tongue right there! Her real name is Golden Harvest and that's what Derpy knows her as.
She has no idea Carrot Top is Golden's alias at Guilty's house, and Golden would certainly not approve of anyone knowing she goes there, if I know her correctly in your story.
This is not brought up again later in the chapter. No response from Derpy "Who's Carrot Top? Why's he calling you Carrot Top?" Golden was more irritated he spoke to her rather than adressing her by her alias. Guilty didn't seem to notice himself.
I don't know if this was intended or perhaps a mistake. Maybe I missed something. I thought it was interesting, so I wanted to point it out.
Anyway, I'll be looking forward to more chapters. It's a really nice story. Cheers.
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just an error, fixed now.
And another AWESOME chapter. Really no clue what else to say beyond all the normal gushing I've already done. I love your characters, I love the writing, I love everything about his fic. And, where you're going with Carrot Top is simply fascinating, but yes, just waiting til Derpy and Guilty get their happy end.. okay that was a bad choice of words, but you know what I mean.
OH MY GOSH I FOUND IT!!!
I read this when i was just getting started and didnt think to fave it! I put out a blog and everything just to find it! And now its here and so much more is there now!!!
This has just made my day! Liked faved followed
I adore the way you write the interactions with Derpy. Those parts are quickly becoming my favorite part of this series.
It's just amazing how this evolved from just clop (though, granted, well written clop) into a compelling slice-of-life story! Every time I see a new chapter, I just go !
I have spent the last two days reading up on Mr. Pleasure.
I do like the way you flesh out the characters and verbally illustrate the settings.
Please continue the excellent writing.
god dammnit man more more! this is wonderful! i love this!
this pulled me in and please man more
If I read that correctly he told Close about one of his clients. That's a huge faux pas.
Everything else is just excellent. Well written characters, good dialogue, and you might be the only one to portray Applejack as an antagonist and it still works with the character.
Have a mustache (Ride)
Does anybody else read Close's lines in Danny DeVito's voice? Cuz I do, and it fits so well.
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Yep
I've noticed that you fail to capitalize a few names.
Really enjoying this fic though, great job.
Wish granted, it seems, to see Guilty's true talent at work.
We got a lot deeper into his character, and I must compliment you on his depth. This character is a pool we can safely dive into and explore without worrying about getting bored. There's much about him that is broken and the more layers we peel back the dirtier the onion gets-- but all the while we can see what a gentle soul he really is. He's someone I'd like to know, the further we go into this.
Heh. Somepony was about to have a muffin-gasim.
Yeah, I'm right there with ya GP.
2711091 OMG! I am now!!
The dynamic elements of this story is addictive.
Very nice work.
I think Close is officially my favorite character
I just love his attitude, and also how he swears and gives Guilty trouble for swearing too. He always cracks me up!
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Just like my pa, never cares about the horrors flowing from his own mouth, but Lord forbid if I say something even remotely impolite.
Reminds me of my high school days...
My god, the barber reminds me of the barber from Gran Torino. It's hilarious how similar they are...
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Indeed he confirmed it, but knowing Derpy, she almost certainly had already told about him.
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Heck, I had one guy put the business end of a shotgun in my face because he thought I was sleeping with his wife, never mind actually doing so. When a relationship crashes hard enough, anything that brightens the source of the crash is like moths drawn to flames.
Because she smiled at me. Course, he did end up committed the next month, so sanity wasn't probably part of the calculation there. He's better now.
And it is how I did end up married. To his ex. (I'm a widower now, though.)
Derpy sure is good for random moments.
Lovely chapter. Great littel adventure.