When he becomes of age, Spike sets out on a mission given to him by the princesses: to get married. But, as usual, he gets more than he bargained: so much more. Tons of worldbuilding abounds in this story, along with clop and other fun stuff.
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YES! YES!! Finally, we're getting somewhere! Can't wait to see what happens next
Although, it would be rather hilarious if Eutropia either walked in on Spike and his wives banging or was caught watching it.
Another great chapter. Spike's up but it looks like he now has a target on his back. Hopefully he be on his feet by the time that vampony pays him a visit.
[Squeeing intensifies-intensifies]
congrats on the feature!
Ya know, it's funny. I was thinking about asking how the next chapter was coming earlier. Well now I know. Oh and I'd be happy to proofread for you.
We get a little backstory for the Nightmare race I see. Bakhtak has a lot of good traits (according to Ebony), maybe she's a future wife? Talk about coincidences, her knowing Asalah like that, though it's nice that they've met again. I don't like the look of that "Lobelia", if that's even her real name. Nice job with the feature, and I'll be happy to proofread for you. When's the next chapter gonna be ready?
Yaay, Spike is up and getting creamed by zebra wife. No room in the bed? theres always the cellar, kitchen, bathroom, or whichever other rooms there are seperate in that building?
Evil mind manipulating illusionist shapechaner is evil, changeling?
The ultimate male problem. Shopping for female clothing.
I will proofread if you need help! I'm always willing to help.
Anyways, great chapter. loved the twist of asalah already knowing Bakhtak. keep up the great work
I wouldn't mind proofreading. You wouldn't have to worry about time before a response either, as I am on every day.
I would share my proofreading skills with you, but i have an ongoing curse that makes the author of the stuff i proofread stop writing, for some reason. So ya, i dont want to ruin a story for the third time.
I have a bad feeling in one of the next few chapters
5013452 It is great to see our scaly friend up and moving around again. I wonder how our griffon guest will handle finally being able to talk to Spike. Oh all his wives will be offering the back door and head to their long lost husband now that he has returned to them lol.It will still be a while till Spike is back up to fighting shape again to handle this new threat. Lets hope they can hold off till then
OMG AN UPDATE!!!
HOORAY!
Plz keep it up! also I would love to Proof-read.
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Strangly, I'm a little disappointed about that, but that is completely due to the possibility that Euthropia has yet to see Spike the husband/father/leader/royal. All she has seen of him so far is someone that is sickly, weakened and (to her at least) the reason that she was forced to move to places far outside of her element.
I do wonder how she does finally see it first-hand. If the way Asalah glomped Spike was any indication, Euthropia will see this coming sooner than she realizes....hehehe...
Ultimately when Spike is finally healthy enough to be himself again, he is able to show to the young Spartan that he is not a monster, but rather someone who can be as truthful and helpful, and that he can be as open as her mother. After all Euthropia, your mother would have never agreed to have you stay with the dragon and his family if she (Myrinna the gryphonness) felt that you would be an very good and strong hands. And don't ever forget--you are there with four other females that (with the exceptions of Trixie and Chrysalis) are roughly the same age as you, and are more than willing to open up and help you out. Each has their own trials and tribulations, but they can teach you things that you couldn't learn in Istanbul, and maybe eventually you will teach them some things that they don't know.
Yay new chapter. I might possibly be able to proofread because I have no life after I get home from school. Yahoo answers is my only afterschool friend XD
5018224 Are you spying on me?
Hey hey hey everyone, Sorry about the long wait for the chapter, I have been busy with crap and I assume Abra has. Proofread it about a day or two ago.
Spike meets a female of an ancient, nearly dead, race, and will either; A) get another wife, B) help Ebony see what the bat-stallion is missing out on, or C) end up watching his new friends die before killing some evil dip-shit. Possibly a combination there-of.
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That is her real name. She died of a "mysterious illness" a decade ago, remember?
Also, if he marries the Nightmare and Twilight finds out about it at the same time she finds out about Chrysalis, it ain't gonna be pretty.
5019559 Nah, dude. I just spend time here when I'm not on a mission, and we seem to keep running into each other.
5030541 Yeah finish missions faster than I finish books.
5031281 Well, due to some complicated dimensional physics, I return about second after I left, even if it's a months-long mission. But I digress.
5045277 Ha good one.
I just saw a minor problem in this concept, just a minor one.
In all of Celestia's time, all her years upon years of life, why did she just decide to send someone to explore the world now? Also, why would Luna take Spike, a dragon, under her wing? He's merely a scribe, nothing more or less. Taking in a member of the Lunar Guard would probably be much more practical. He has no link to the moon, and naturally produces much more heat. Hell, he even breathes fire. Besides, he's way too young and unseasoned to simply throw out in the world with only your name and guidance to assist him. Let me guess, didn't even have much training with a sword? Why would he? He's just a scribe.
The Princess of The Sun no doubt has hundreds of extremely knowledgeable scholars and professors that are a hundred times more suited for such a voyage. Another thing that would be slightly stupid, why is she sending one person to face the entire world? Why not, a team of students to relay the late information back? There's probably going to be all sorts of illnesses that may lurk out there. Maybe some immunization shots? Although, I guess that'd be a reason to send a dragon. I'm sure they no doubt have a strong immune system, right? Speaking of protection, why can't it be arranged for his wives (Different thing I'll rant on later) to simply return back to their respective houses and homes until he's ready to go back to Equestria? If I remember correctly, Maria had an outstanding place all the child-bearing mares could safely stay at, possibly birth his (genes, go on that later) off-spring? Why he, the caring father, simply escort them all back there?
5052775 I want to answer this in full... in an upcoming blog post. There's a lot to cover, so I'll... I'll be back.
5052852 I eagerly await.
5052880 Also, this:
Care to elaborate? I'm curious.
5052880 It's up.
Estimated time on the new chapter, eagerly awaiting it.
5053262 ETA... unknown. I am working on it.
5053844 i really wish i could thumb up my own comment...
5052919 Yes, the fact he's going to traverse a new land, all the while collecting beautiful, healthy, young mares nearly blinds me. It lacks all realism, how this new fellow swoops in, saves the day, and gets the mare tenfold. Then, of course in the first two months of meeting him, be married and impregnated by him. Oh, and the children! I suppose it's tended for them to arrive without trouble or defects? It's not like breeding two entirely different species could possibly result in a horrible abomination, right? Honestly, I could barely contain myself when I saw Chrysalis was pregnant. You were stretching it enough with ponies, but with changelings? It's like, breeding a pig and an alligator. It simply can't work. If you added things you could expect to happen in a real situation, I'd love your story. But. with unending luck, does Spike manage and protect all of his load. By now, I'd have made someone die. Be it a family member at home falling ill or one of his gathering wives heaving over in the road, a sacrifice would be made. In order to make sure the reader knows no character is somehow bullet-proof. Somehow above the concept of death and his cruel, powerful grip.
5053915 Don't worry. I did it for you
May have taken me all night and 2 cups of high strength coffee, but I finally caught up with the story so far. And I am not disappointed in the slightest.
I'm actually kind of glad you toned down on the amount of clop in the recent 10 chapters or so. In excess it started to get somewhat grating on the nerves, but now there's more room for proper development with the volume reduced like it has.
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Judging by her interactions with Ebony, I'm guessing more towards B.
5053922 I wasn't exactly sure how to respond to this comment right away, so I thought it over a bit. My only other point is that I've mentioned dragons are omni-breeders, in that they can interbreed with just about anything. Other than that...
I'm... I'm sad now. I realize that so much of this story is just pure luck, but... do you want me to kill off a wife? Do you want me to kill a character I have worked so hard to craft, to characterize, to develop and make a part of this story, all because they seem far too lucky? Do you want me to put Spike through the pain of losing a wife and potentially his unborn child, just because there isn't enough drama in the story?
Do you want me to put myself through writing that, to treat what I have written with such contempt and such coldness that it may have been better that I never wrote this story at all?
My problem is I care too much, and hate seeing conflict that results in death of those whom I hold dear. This is especially true of OCs I have crafted: just blatanly killing them off after having them play such an integral part of the story... it hurts me. It actually physically causes my heart to ache and makes me want to cry. I'm not against killing off ponies or even family members of characters, but a spontaneous abortion... that hits too close to home for me to write.
I'm sorry if this is coming off as guilt-tripping, but... this story is not meant to be too deep or brooding or emotional in the slightest. It's supposed to be one big, somewhat nonsensical, wish-fulfilling romp across the world with Spike and his ever-growing family. I'm sorry if you wished it was more than that, that it was some George R. R. Martin-esque tale, but... I can't do that. This story means too much to me to just... go down a road like that.
Now... now I don't know if I can write any more. I feel like all I'll be able to think of is "should they have escaped that" or "could they have died there", and that... that can't be me. It just can't.
5055082 you sir, are right in those aspects, I can relate to it in a way, I play a dungeon and dragons game but in the form of Star Wars and I'm the DM so I have to make up NPCs and followers for the group and it pains me so when a guy I had with that group from the start to this point dies either from story line issues or a punk in the player controlled group gets them killed, I put so much thought into these guys I have a whole notebook full of backgrounds for DM controlled players. I get so attached to these guys I sometimes write stories involving just them.
5055082 So, you're confirming no wives die? Wow, suspense for death has been killed. Ironic, eh? Now, on other words, perhaps considering on how you would ease any of your prized bevy into the other world may assist in making you feel like a less-luck based writer. Maybe, while giving birth, any of that reptile's family passes? I'd author something more violent and unexpected, but I'm sure that'd be a fitting way to fell one of your ever-so dear wives. Not to sound crude, but I'd off nearly anyone to prove the value of every other character. Trust me, everyone will start to love Chrysalis when Trixe was brought down. Cut the resource, the need desire more. Let them stare in the miasma of Lost Faith and it shall burn.
5054960 thanks.
Hm, we seem to be at in impasse with the readers; well the ones that are commenting anyway. For those that 'demand' a tone shift to a darker feel.
Let me ask you this; why after almost 50 chapters would the author change the tone? Granted they may get bored at some point and may try it out, but given what we've seen so far. It would seem out of place to have things do a sudden 'tone shift' because this needs to be gritty and dark.
This is an amusing 'what if' scenario we have with Spike stepping out of the mane six's shadow; something that you don't see too often. Yeah it has a lot of silly if not bizarre moment, but that's what we came for.
If you came for something dark and sad. Go check out some of those grim dark stories that pop up from time to time.
5054979 That... I would not mind that
5055082 i'm in if you would take me, just read my profile, i'm always happy to give a helping hand.